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Resisting a beginning

 

(an old morality tale sexed up)

Christ Girl, don`t prance past like that,
Flashing that long shaft of gleaming thigh.
Now he`s awake!  Didn`t you notice that,
Didn`t you see him stir a little then?
Just wait, he`ll nudge me in a while
And, opening one tired lazy, lolling eye,
Ask the mute question...Oh, I`ll refuse,
But its the cost! You, girl, could never feel
The excruciating wither of his contempt
Or know the way it makes my manhood cringe.
He had a kingdom once and he`ll commit
Bloody carnage to re-conquer it

(This beast, you think is nuzzling my neck
Insidiously desires me by the throat).
 

◄ High rise city centre fairy tale

Uber Alles. ►

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Harry O'Neill

Wed 21st Oct 2015 20:38

Cynthia,
Thanks for the spot...(fixed it)...and causing me to look at it again.

And realise that - in my anxiety to do it as a kind of blank verse sonnet - thing I`ve probably done the theme a diservice.

I was trying to get a male flesh-feel into a tempting thing but missed out the idea of betrayal.

when this cold-bug goes I might try it again (if I can) in a looser form.

Sorry for going on a bit...but you made me think...thanks.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 20th Oct 2015 11:39

Good one, Harry. It packs a lot of punch.

Stick another 'n' in 'beginning' (since it's right up-front.) Just a typo, I'm sure.

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