Disappointments

Tequila sage lip burn on top of a curry belly,

Synthetic daylight lamp to give me vitamin D’ssssssssssssssss.

Dreaming of going west - south, to the Andes and Amazon jungle charms,

But the gods do not permit this move at this time in my life. So,

I'll demo-shaman some alchemy psalms

And bang my drum to the beat of the ruts and trenches so far forlorn. My

Frustration fed by coffee and nicotine embalmed.

◄ Rob the train

On Visiting Rome ►

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<Deleted User> (13762)

Sun 15th Nov 2015 08:59

I'm with David - shake it up - not sure about 'so far forlorn' but some good lines

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DavidAddington

Sun 8th Nov 2015 23:40

I think it is esoteric in places and I have other scribbles in the same vein which are thematic of this type of thing: shamanism, mystique, destiny kind of thing.

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DavidAddington

Sun 8th Nov 2015 23:38

Thanks Graham. I will defo look at that. It was a bit spare of the moment - punk DIY ethos to how I view art.

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 8th Nov 2015 23:23

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 8th Nov 2015 23:22

Intrigued David,
Personally I love the words but not the layout. Certain words here need to start each line. It's all great stuff but needs a shake up. Line five is wonderful.

Well done.

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