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First Love

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I used to love those cells so much

Those that became so fond of you

Trapped as I was between youth and despair

Holding onto branches and life’s first parting of hair

 

I used to lie in bed

Turning over life’s first body blow

You growing cold

Whilst my hair was wet with fever

 

And I as a boy said

“Don’t go”

Not knowing why or what for

A few years before I kicked a ball around

Was delighted with ice cream

Never asking for nothing

 

Then my cells felt so much, became fond of you

Trapped as I was in life’s first parting of hair

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David R Mellor

Mon 9th May 2016 21:24

thanks Martin, glad you liked it

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David R Mellor

Mon 9th May 2016 21:23

Hi Lynn , looking at the poem again maybe your right, thanks for comment

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Lynn Dye

Mon 9th May 2016 14:37

I really like this, and could be wrong but I wonder if it is the love of a mother from one so young.

(Mind you, not judging by the picture! Haha.)

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Martin Elder

Mon 9th May 2016 12:31

An interesting take on first love. Nice one David

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