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Unstitching itself
On boat shaped stones
Underneath the pier
Lost in the sunset
These are class words, a poem in itself.
Can I ask you to re-look at a couple of things like
"within second" should this be seconds?
.........and is "wrote in feelings" correct?
Personally I'd lose the picture too!
very well done Andy.
thanks everybody. this piece came from bad news from three different friends over 24 hours.
Really enjoyed this Andy, especially this section:
"Singing unwritten songs
On the other side
Of the ridge
In half kindled feelings"
Great!
I agree with Martin. Some lovely lines in this, Andy.
There are some great lines here Andy. I particularly like the second stanza Nice one
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Andy N
Wed 3rd Aug 2016 12:30
thanks Graham.
your edits are correct.
i need to correct them.
glad you like this poem however.
regards
andy