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Broken Heart

Shoes lost its ropes

The birds lost their wings

Time was so less to decide

Silence fills my days

 

My mind slumped into a dark corner

I thought you were healing me, but

you broke my heart into million pieces

I look so happy on the outside, but

I was so mess inside

 

You said you love me, but

you dated her once again

You said you will stay with me forever

Forever is shit

 

It is just an illusion

Now I leave you without a sound

 

broken heart

_deasemooie_

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Comments

Big Sal

Tue 7th Aug 2018 16:52

Powerful emotion . . .If I may offer a suggestion? If you're not up for editing a 2 year old poem though I completely understand. .I think in the first stanza if you put 'lose' instead of 'lost', it would better fit the flow of the piece.

Like I said though, no harm in keeping old poems the way they are to look back on and improve oneself in the future. Good job on all your work thus far.?

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