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Mea Culpa

 

It had been betrayal
And I knew it
As I sat on the tavern stool
Disconsolate.


In the hollow
That had been my heart
Firebrands spluttered
And several
Disconcerted presences
Were writhing
From the unaccustomed light.


 Pat on cue
Sidled monsieur solliciteur
Purring of captivation
Helplessness
All of the intertwiningly enticing
Eve rousing Adam
Plea for a compassionate acquittal


And his words were so considerate
So velvet glove
So soothing a secular saviour
Of my tormented soul
That my eager arms
Would have clasped him to me
And concurred.


But with that very notion
The intent
Of what this surreptitious
Suave dissimulator
Was about
Suddenly burst upon me
And I was afraid.


 Frantic
He was already in too far
Too plausibly infused
 Too inextricable
I determined
Something had need be done
And on the nonce.


 And so seizing
The carver from the Carvery
I plunged
With all the might of my right shoulder
The glinting steel
Into the quaggy mid-most of his gut
And held it there.


Prostrate
And transfixed across my knee
He now lies moribund
 And quieted
Fitfully pulsating
Globs of slow-congealing suppuration
Round my wrist.


Soon I will stand
And cast this carcase from me
Buckle to what behoves my circumstance
And move ahead
Into the freshening future
Muttering
Over and over again.


It had been betrayal
And I knew it.
As I...

 

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◄ Confiteor

(: A Sunday Thought :) ►

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John Marks

Fri 23rd Jun 2023 17:25

This poem reminds me of why I was drawn to WoL all those years ago. Harry certainly knew how to turn a phrase and his mastery of scansion was second to none. I miss his thoughtfulness and his astute intelligence. John

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 1st Sep 2016 20:56

Cynthia,
Thanks for your comments, particularly about the format and the clearness of the theme. (I was worried) My problem is that `free`(for me) is too untidy. (no one has ever convinced me about line ends). So I write it `down` the poem with always the beat of Iambic - with halts of one-line singles - going through my mind...I`m never sure that it has `worked`...The minimum punctuation is to give the lines a chance to stand alone....I know what you mean about that bloody zzz (I`m taking that bit off anyway)...
Thanks for concentrating my thoughts.

(hope your eyes are okay now)






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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 31st Aug 2016 11:50

An interesting read. Excellent format. Fab diction. I had to check 'cogniscence' and 'casuistry', although both seemed quite clear from the poem.

Jeeez, no two sources want to spell 'congizance' the same way - must be one of those argued-about words in esteemed halls, like the usage of punctuation in the UK. Yours seems most reasonable (as if THAT cuts any mustard!)

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 29th Aug 2016 00:20

This is the over - mystified `Confiteor` Done a bit different and now - I hope - more understandable (I promise I won`t do it again ?)

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