get paid and gas
my elbows touch the edge of a counter
i'm near to the cash register
and you're thinking
maybe she works here
and i'm thinking
maybe i'll stay working here
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Comments
Are these spontaneous lines? Never editted? all your work is so vitally capturing. You know the 'tranche de vie' business in prose, yes? These poems are like snatches of seconds, whole lives in a few short lines. You are very very good.
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<Deleted User> (6484)
Thu 20th Aug 2009 11:11
I think Cynthia is right, your writing seems spontaneous and good as far as I am concerned.
Bernie