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Part of your pain

Saturday 15th December 2007 5:24 pm

From a corner
Or rising tide
From separate worlds
We have arrived
In the same room
You and I.
We chased the missing
found disappointment
So many times
From the failing tries
To bland sublime
Relationships

If purity is our goal
And long term loving
The shoal of which we long,
To be part,
Then onward with hope,
Continue to search.
But only the unplanned
Truly yields success
For you can never force love
When it wants to arrive
pray the dreams in which
We nightly dress
Finally unfold in the waking time

I have become a part of your pain
We have become integrated
And engraved
We share the same
pieces
Rough at the edges
But with stars in our eyes

14th December 2007

◄ you paid for it

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Comments

Francine

Mon 3rd Aug 2009 14:05

I absolutely LOVE this!!!!!
Tu sais écrire des poèmes qui touchent le coeur profondément...
xxxxx

Pete Crompton

Tue 18th Dec 2007 10:19

Kevin, Mia, Darren, Clarissa. Thank you very much for all this support and feedback! Its touching that you take the time to comment and read my ramblings!

Well you know I sometimes just feel an emotion even if its not about me.

as long as I can somehow feel it. Im sure you know what I mean with your writing.

I find love poetry quite fulfilling and there seems no end to the variations. You can draw on the past if you still are touched by it.

clarissa mckone

Tue 18th Dec 2007 02:48

My bet is its Rose

clarissa mckone

Tue 18th Dec 2007 02:21

lucky, sorry got kids with the flu here, running around, doing all the good mommy stuff!

clarissa mckone

Tue 18th Dec 2007 02:17

So true Keven its very hard to convince them of your love, I read this poem over and over and just wonder who the luck girl is.

Kevin Connolly

Mon 17th Dec 2007 23:47

We chased the missing
found disappointment
So many times
From the failing tries
To bland sublime
Relationships

For you can never force love
When it wants to arrive
pray the dreams in which
We nightly dress
Finally unfold in the waking time

We share the same
pieces
Rough at the edges
But with stars in our eyes

- This is a sublime love poem, Pete. We're all so different - and yet, on a deeper level, we're exactly the same.
The hard part is convincing the one you love that that's the truth.

Mia Darlone

Sun 16th Dec 2007 14:40

Thanks for your comment Pete, at least I don't totally die on my arse on paper! Well done at the slam by the way.
Your poetry is much more cleverer than what mine is, my mother still says to me 'I wish you'd speak proper like what I do'.

Fellow writing addict Darlone.

Pete Crompton

Sat 15th Dec 2007 17:25

Thank you Clarissa and Darren. Darren yes I totally agree, I have put the 'a' in as you could even say 'apart' 'a part' so i like the duel aspect. Thanks so much for spotting this.

Pete

darren thomas

Sat 15th Dec 2007 14:10

Your talent is obvious with every single word.
"I have become part of your pain" ?
"I have become a part of your pain" ?
I would be tempted to add an 'a' ...but then will that change the whole initial meaning? Ooh, I don't know.
Great Poem Pete.

clarissa mckone

Sat 15th Dec 2007 00:58

It a nice poem flows very well. Im sure yall will be fine. happy holidays
xx clarissa
pss...... say hi to Rose for me

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