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Muddle Puddle

Eyes and lips
which
blossom from your carved face,
sugar skull, sherbert fizz.
To Mr, from Mz,
we really wanted to fuck this.
Turned my brain insane,
my tongue inside
out.


Caught in fog,
in haze, like cloudy lemonade;
a gaze, let's misbehave.
Infatuated,
I won't make it.
Too intense:
this forever pretence,
can't do more pretend.
Beg.

 

Take a hot hit,
bit by bit,
I got bit!
Never split!
Please, sit.
You opened the lid,
let's not kid.


I like the look of your hips,
the way your voice dips,
when it gets like this,
and we kiss,
we kiss.
I like the look of your lips,
this.
I miss,
miss this.
Just make a wish,
make a wish:
that this
is
it.

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Infatuationintenselovepainpassionrelationshipsextorture

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Comments

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Alexandra Parapadakis

Tue 21st Feb 2017 11:29

Thanks for the comments guys!

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 13th Dec 2016 11:28

First read it sounds like nonsense and I don't get it.

By the fifth read images begin to appear and tiny little whiffs of sentiment creep out of each stanza.

This is very different, clever and much more pared down than your usual work Alexandra.

Why do I keep thinking about Clockwork Orange?

<Deleted User> (13762)

Tue 13th Dec 2016 08:55

I like this AP although the hot-bit-bit-bit-split-sit-lid-kid left my tongue a little inside out. Unfortunately I added an 's' to the front of 'hit' in the line 'take a hot hit' so maybe that distracted me! Otherwise a good poetical word play around with a suitable and well-chosen title. Good stuff.

thanks for posting,
Colin

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Jeff

Mon 12th Dec 2016 19:39

Meant to say relate! Ooopppssss

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Jeff

Mon 12th Dec 2016 19:38

Fantastic! Can reflate. Jeff

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