My mission is to venture, unnoticed,
Deep within the recess of your eyes,
To inspect the optical machines
Housing the machinations
Of your visual world.
I must employ a spy's stealth,
Distract the guarding globes,
And glide with surgical precision
Along the viscous suspension,
To find the doors of perception.
Once inside, I will clinically remove
The lacuna that keeps me from view
And install surveillance that
Indelibly imprints my face and
Triggers your heart's alarm.
Splendidly conceived, and beautifully written. Much enjoyed.
There is a famous novel by Kingsolver too, isn't there, called 'Lacuna'?
I used this word in a line like 'lacunas of slippery sleep' and my kids said, 'Don't use such difficult words, Mum.' And I replied, 'Look it up. It fits exactly what I want to say.' And they did, and they said,'OK, accepted.' Families are tough critics, and worth their weight in gold.
Thanks Jeff, such an encouraging comment, I'm so pleased you liked this. Strange word 'lacuna', I first read it in Daniel Goleman's book 'Emotional Intelligence' where he used it to describe people not being able to see things as they really are - a sort of blindspot. It just seemed appropriate for this piece. Thanks again. Paul.
Fabulous Paul...& I learnt a new word too...thanks for sharing...Jeff...
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Paul Waring
Sat 7th Jan 2017 15:09
Thank you Cynthia for your warm and wonderful comments. I wasn't aware of Kingsolver's novel of the same name but I'm very intrigued to read it now! And I agree wholeheartedly with your comment about families! Paul