the waking the raising
the peeing the showering
the drying the brushing
the spraying the dressing
the boiling the squeezing
the popping the spreading
the sitting the scoffing
the clearing the washing
the listening the watching
the ringing the standing
the walking the opening
the facing the greeting
the inviting the entering
the hearing the shocking
the hearing the shocking
the hearing the shocking
the news .......
I have to agree with what has already been said here Paul , a stunning yet simple poem, well delivered, just emphasising what actually is News?
Rose, thank you, what a touching compliment. I've only been posting here for just over two weeks and I'm incredibly happy to be part of so many interesting, creative and inspiring kindred spirits. There are so many people on here encouraging each other's work and sharing humour too, as you and several others do. If I was 40 years younger I wouldn't hesitate to to say, "big up yourselves"!!
Hazel, thank you, short and sweet, and on the money.
Paul
I know I know I know
The shock of the new
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 7th Jan 2017 17:35
re-being a ropey version of Oakley or, butt-poor Bono impersonator-maybe-but I think I can say with fair certainty,that you would beat that 'duo' hands down,when it comes to writing poetry!
An opportune moment to say thanks Paul,for bringing a breath of communicative fresh air,to WOL.
Rose ?
Thank you Rose, lovely to read your insights, it always amazes how many different creative interpretations can come from a piece. Reading the rich variety of feedback about poems makes being on WoL so interesting and enjoyable. As for me singing, imagine a poor man's Bono or a ropey Phil Oakley from the Human League! Paul
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 7th Jan 2017 16:38
this has the 'force feeding' aspect about it Paul which in sad reality,that,is how it (the news) is almost inescapably served up.
fortunately,there is also the more acceptable kind of 'force feeding' which we most certainly would not want to escape-the gifts of nature!
let me hear you sing-# and so say all of us!#
Rose ?
Thank you again Cynthia, you have absolutely nailed it, I'm so pleased it has come across as I intended. Thank you again for such positive comments. Paul
Very interesting - clever concept - drawing out the sameness of the average morning shattered by 'the news'. The repetition at the end is brilliant, simulating the idea that the words can't quite be 'taken in', or that they 'hammer the senses'.
The never-ending variations of poetry are thrilling to write and to read.
Thanks Jeff and Raj for your interesting comments about this poem that tries to describe the flow of a mundane morning in someone's life that is suddenly shattered by bad news. A bit dark I know.......! Paul
Nice one Paul.
I likened that to a mantra. Still resonates.
Sadly bad news sells but at the end of the day good will triumph. Always has.
Raj.
Worlds still a wonderful place...but politics & religion will see us all dead one day... Well put.....Jeff..
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Paul Waring
Sun 8th Jan 2017 08:59
Martin, thank you, another great compliment, I really appreciate what you and others have said about this piece which has been interpreted in different ways, ways that didn't occur to me as I wrote it. What I tried to describe is the rhythm of a morning routine, then a ring of the door bell and the delivery of devastating news. Thanks again, Paul