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You're too complacent

A stranger in my own skin
Even I don't know where I've been
My mind is always distracted 
Don't know what I've contracted 
My heart beat makes quite a din 
You can hear it if you're listenin'

It's when I think of you 
I don't know what to do
I bet you don't know who
I am or even what I do 

I'm lying to myself 
You know me better
Better than anyone else

I regret what we did 
Who we became
What I undid 
It'll never be the same 

But you're constant 
Too complacent 
You thought you were trying
But we were still dying 
I was falling and falling 
Always falling 

Now I let go
I don't know
Who's falling faster?
It doesn't matter
As long as we make it
When the bottom is hit 
We can climb back up together 
We can blissfully climb forever

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Comments

Alonleymouse

Thu 12th Jan 2017 21:31

Thank you for your comments

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Juan Pablo Lynch

Wed 11th Jan 2017 01:47

That turn around in the end was awesome...From start to end actually the poem was quite captivating

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Raj Ferds

Tue 10th Jan 2017 09:03

Like it Aishah,

It looked like it was heading for a fatalistic end and then the twist. You rise again like the phoenix...
"blissfully climb forever."

Raj

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