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Album of the Sea

There's a wistful song entangled in my head,

uplifting itself in the hushed hours of dawn.

 

and I can’t decide what it is, exactly.

and I’m not entirely sure where it comes from.

 

but in the understories of the ambience,

I can hear the brash thrust of the waves toward the sand,

and then the slow draw-backs of the ocean crusade,

carrying pebbles and sea shells and whatever else 

that failed to cling on such severed shores.

 

and though the title of the music eludes me,

I do know who composed it.

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Tristan Ayran

Sat 14th Jan 2017 23:08

Hey collin! Those are nice words, thank you so much. Im glad you liked it. And yes, I should not have put the "-the mad balladist" at the end, youre right. Its just that I have my poems elsewhere in the internet under the name the mad balladist.

Again, thank you. As a beginner poet, words like these keep me wanting to write more.

tristan

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Sat 14th Jan 2017 17:32

I almost passed this by but am glad I clicked the link and read to the end as you have composed some lovely lines to make your Album of the Sea. However, for me, THE MAD BALLADIST last line is not needed. I think it would be rather lovely to leave the poem open ended:

and though the title of the music eludes me,
I do know who composed it.

Good stuff Tristan. I look forward to reading some more of your work. All the best, Colin.

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Tristan Ayran

Sat 14th Jan 2017 02:12

Thanks Harshit!

Harshit Singh

Fri 13th Jan 2017 21:39

Well written..

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