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I Think I Love You More Than Chocolate

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I’m not going into this
So blind I can’t see,
But when you position me
Across cotton territories
I fumble at the seams
     Overwhelmed in us
As we shake the cobwebs free
To drift lazily into autumn dreams
Leaving ghost of summer past,
Clutching at layers of fabric
          I slip the silk shift
Over unsightly permanent scar
Wickedly chasing shooting stars.

Position me carefully
In perfection I weep
          Remembering
As you grip and feed,
When the world shut its door
I gathered you to me
Knowing it would be easier
To let you go.

A little fatal flaw
I think I love you
More than chocolate

More than those lyrics
In that song you remiss,
Perhaps more than yawning seas
Or buttercup sun’s artery,
Or the softness of God’s breeze

          Whispering

More than mythology, theology or
Ideology................
More than life’s mysteries

This fatal flaw
Of the heart
Carries permanent scars
That I grapple and twist
Leading to spinning seminars,
Released inside fractured skull
Slaughtered in my abattoir

Position me wisely
I’ve not far to fall.

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Chris Dawson

Mon 29th Dec 2008 00:16

I absolutely love this.
Cx

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clarissa mckone

Wed 19th Dec 2007 02:36

Bubo, this is wonderful!

Kevin Connolly

Tue 18th Dec 2007 19:15

A little fatal flaw
I think I love you
More than chocolate
More than those lyrics
In that song you remiss,
Perhaps more than yawning seas
Or buttercup sun’s artery,
Or the softness of God’s breeze

Whispering

More than mythology, theology or
Ideology................
More than life’s mysteries

Position me wisely
I’ve not far to fall.

The very title of this poem would bring the house down at a poetry recital, Bubo. Now that's what I call true love.
Brilliant stuff.

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Tue 18th Dec 2007 17:22

Bubo - This is great write. Lots of metamorphosis in your romantic write. I loved the entire muse. Your creativity shines! 'I Think I Love You More Then Chocolate'...Really great poem...Thank you...Zuzanna

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