She knew he was psycho
It takes two to tango.
she was just as guilty.
She was just as guilty.
He preyed on her because he saw her weaknesses
the holes through her defense
he was gonna score
he was gonna score !
They are not what they seem.
The critters crawling in their teeth
Hiding behind sheep
hiding behind sheep.
<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 7th Mar 2017 14:12
I read this first thing this morning and rather liked it. Just thinking out loud I wondered about cutting that long line down to match the rest and rhyme with the next, say:
He preyed on her weaknesses
the holes (through / in) her defences
I also wondered, because the characters are basically the same whether you could make the whole thing into more of a battle of wits:
she was just as guilty.
he was just as guilty!
he was gonna score
she was gonna score!
hiding behind her sheep
hiding behind his sheep.
It's one of those poems that you could easily play around with I think. Anyways, just some thoughts. Fun with words. C?L
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medamorfisis
Thu 6th Apr 2017 20:16