When a traditional
Music and dance,
Accentuating
A century-old bilateral
Ties, took place
A biracial and mesmeric
Greeck goddess,
With chocolate Lucy's face,
Exhibiting elegance
And radiant face
With splendour
Leased in the citadel of
My heart a place
Making it palpitate
Picking pace
Driving home
The intermingling of
This with that race
At times lends human beings
Unmatched grace! ///
While I was in a reception last night at Greece club here in Ethiopia.
Dear Colin Hill Thank you for the feed back
Where --->
//When a traditional
Music and dance,
Accentuating
A century-old bilateral
Ties, took place// Ethiopia and Greek marked a 100 years old ties this week
Who the loved one is a lady having a blend of Greek and Ethiopia
Greek is famous for goddesses and Ethiopia for being a cradle of mankind Lucy is a metaphor for Ethiopia
/ A biracial and mesmeric
Greek goddess,
With chocolate Lucy's face/-->
Further characterization of the girl
/Exhibiting elegance
And radiant face/
How she rented my hear and made it beat fast/-->
With splendour
Leased in the citadel of
My heart a place
Making it palpitate
Picking pace/
The message
// Driving home
The intermingling of
This with that race
At times lends human beings
Unmatched grace! //
Here instead of Intermingling I should have used cross breeding
After face I shoud also have used a comma.
The message is/
Driving home
The intermingling of
This with that race
At times lends human beings
Unmatched grace! // the title also speaks about the message.
The poem with the amendement looks like this
Unmatched grace
When a traditional
Music and dance,
Accentuating
A century-old bilateral
Ties, took place
A biracial and mesmeric
Greek goddess,
With chocolate Lucy's face,
Exhibiting elegance
And radiant face,
With splendour
Leased in the citadel of
My heart a place
Making it palpitate
Picking pace
Driving home
The cross breeding of
This with that race
At times lends human beings
Unmatched grace! ///
The title itself talks about this observation
<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 25th Mar 2017 23:17
Lots going on here Alem - I have images floating in and out of my head and am not sure how well they fit with your words but it doesn't really matter. What matters is that you have written something to inspire them.
The Greece club in Ethiopia sounds enticing too.
All the best,
Colin
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Mon 27th Mar 2017 19:21
Hello Alem, thank you for the explanation which was both interesting and insightful. I didn't know about the 100 year link between Greece and Ethiopia but I did understand the reference to Lucy and the cradle of mankind. If it was up to me to choose I would pick 'intermingling' over 'cross-breeding'.
All the best,
Colin