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Felling Us

your will, of course, would 

eventually do the work 

driving a wedge between us

edging deeper into the


splintering cracks, slowly

revealing the tumour

that digested the bark

of our rotting timber


and sensing the end, an 

accumulated intent added 

weight to your will with 

exaggerated swings 


and staccatoed slashes 

of blades that finally did 

the felling, as silence found us

on this killing floor

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Paul Waring

Thu 20th Apr 2017 17:29

Hi Andy, many thanks for digging this one up (if you'll excuse the pun) and for the kind comment.

I don't have a particular affinity with trees but have become more interested in nature in general since I retired.

Thanks again,

Paul

Travis Brow

Thu 20th Apr 2017 06:52

Paul, you paint an acutely painful picture of a dying relationship; it's a hard read, but a great poem.

Your profile pic is arboreal, as is the metaphorical nature of the poem. Do you have an affinity with trees? I do, specifically Beech trees, coincidentally my mother's maiden name.

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Paul Waring

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 18:17

Thank you Graham for a lovely compliment.

I think you, David and I, the 'tree fellas', agree that in reality a tree cannot fall silently. And if anyone doubts this they should ask TIM BURR ?

Oh, how we laughed......

Paul

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 12:15

A great allegory Paul in so many ways.

On the matter of do trees fall silently, I do not subscribe to the notion that they do. We know they don't because we can witness the falling and hear the associated noise. So they obviously make the same noise whether we're there to hear it or not. Whoever dreamed that up is bonkers surely?

more to the point "In space, no-one can hear you scream"

Good work!

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Paul Waring

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 12:07

Thanks David and Hazel for your comments.

David, interesting perspectives, a tree does effectively fall in silence if no-one is around. The silence in this poem, of course, is the end/death of a relationship, characterised as a tree that is eventually felled by the one who is hell-bent on breaking up. And, how true, this 'falling in silence' could happen in what appear to us as perfect relationships.

Hazel, such lovely words, I really am grateful to you.

Thanks again to you both,

Paul

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Hazel ettridge

Mon 3rd Apr 2017 10:12

I always love your images. They bring me closer to the truth - peeling off the bark.

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