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Not Noticed by Zakiya Johnson

Who notices the beautiful flower

No one does because she is broken

But now awoken she notices

No one seems to leave a care

Leave a care for one who's broken

And just out there

She is scared

She will fade soon and no one will hear...

The words that's spoken

From underneath the girl thats broken

Rainy dream, she tries to breath

Damp, dry, air that's cold

Watch her life unfold

Non restored, she's lost

Trying to find her story

Only joy is showed within her future

Believed to be connect by heart and hands of another soul

But with the thought of solitude & doubt

She will forever sit in the cold alone

Because no one likes a broken little soul.

 

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brokenbutawoken

◄ Deep Sea by Zakiya Johnson

Comments

<Deleted User> (13762)

Fri 7th Apr 2017 19:06

lovely lilting rhythm to this piece Zakiya especially in the first half. I like the repetition of some of the words and the rhymes within lines like broken / awoken. Yes, rhymes don't have to be relegated to the ends of lines and mixing them up adds layers in my opinion. Thanks for posting.
Colin

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