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A Sad Memory

A Sad Memory

 

The furniture lorry advanced to the crest of a hill

a journey of several hours in a cramped space

I had no idea what lay in store

not even imaginings to stimulate the mind

only a sadness for what had been left behind.

I sat perched between two men

precariously holding my goldfish bowl

Warwickshire, Nan and my Aunts bade farewell

as I peered ahead to see what lay in store

The lorry lumbered under its heavy load

shaking and shuddering as it climbed

Then at the summit of the crest

a landscape spread out before me

for which my heart sank aghast

In a valley far down below were rows,

upon rows of replicated dwellings

interspersed with tall satanic chimneys

which spewed out a black dense smoke

In the driver´s cab no one spoke

I felt cheated, misled and taken away

cut adrift, bereft of light and day

From leafy lanes and village greens 

I entered a landscape of a another world

in which a new life awaited

and one I knew that would be hated

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◄ Quakers

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Comments

<Deleted User> (16837)

Sat 15th Apr 2017 10:04

i loved the journey....it sure feels the same..you wish to enjoy the countryside and scenery, but the jerks and bumps spoil it...and of course leaving the place where u lived for long, is always a sad experience, and the fear of moving to a new place is also a sad experience.....i loved it till the end....hope u enjoy ur new den....lol!!!

<Deleted User> (13762)

Fri 14th Apr 2017 08:06

this doesn't sound like Tenerife Keith. btw do you get called 'Tenerife Keith'?

I do like this poem, it takes the reader on the journey, squeezed in with the goldfish. In my mind I took a side road at the mention of Nan. Got me thinking how some elderly people might feel leaving their homes and being shunted around council run care homes, perhaps ending up in places they had no connection with.

there is also a 'Jerusalem' feel to this. And did those feet etc. Except the feet are the furniture lorry wheels cresting the hill and the dark satanic mills are your tall satanic chimneys. Good work Keith.

Colin

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