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Mill Girl

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after Willi Ronis

 

In the quietness between

before and after, the girl

unspools her broken thread,

addressing the problem

of time she has lost.

 

Abstracted, briefly,

from her routine,

her posture is that

of a handmaid or lover

bestowing an intimate gift.

 

Yet kneeling there,

on her own, she is like

an ingénue, taking in

some visitant’s

otherworldly news.

 

Her arms stretched

before her, she seems

to play invisible strings,

a harp whose cadences fade

into the noise beyond her.

 

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Comments

<Deleted User> (13762)

Wed 17th May 2017 20:54

this is very good David but forgive me if I wonder out loud whether the two middle verses are somewhat (un)intentionally erotic - her mind wandering as she kneels, 'a handmaid or lover bestowing an intimate gift'. And then again as an ingenue, an innocent young woman perhaps. Apologies if my interpretation is way off the mark.

The last verse is a lovely interpretation of the image and contrasts her abstracted and dreamy solitude to that of the noisy mill. I agree with Cynthia about the build up and thank you also for the photography reference which I will certainly check out. All the best, Colin

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 17th May 2017 17:22

A wonderful scenario. And built upon an accident, 'a broken thread'. A disruption.Vital to the cloth. Time consuming. And costly. The possibilities of interpretation are just endless. The second verse is lovely.

Thanks for the reference to Willi Ronis.

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Paul Waring

Wed 17th May 2017 13:08

I really enjoyed this David.

Thanks for posting.

Paul

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