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Sense of Silence

Let the silence grow within
like a secret never told,
like a fist clutching from inside,
like sunset on quiet sea.
The secret whispers, then,
deep into eyes that don’t see.
The hand unfolds, then,
reveals what was never kept.
The night caresses the day,
torn like ancient gods once were,
and silence spreads without a gesture
and opens motherly eyes offering, at last,
the most demanding shelter.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 21st Oct 2009 19:48

I've read this many times. I finally see what works for me. I split it into three stanzas of four lines each, completely discarding the 'ancient gods' thing, and then it seems all connected in thought.
I never do this to another person's poem, but have a look and see what you think?

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