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The Prettiest Girl in the Co-op

You were the prettiest girl in the Co-op.

You said it yourself, to the lad on the other till,
when I was in the queue.
You were just messing around, of course,
flirting a little, perhaps,
but it was true.

You asked me once, as you scanned my sausages,
if the sun had gone down yet.
You said you were starving.
I told you it hadn’t, and knew what it meant -
that a couple of drinks in the pub
wouldn’t be your idea of fun.

Then one day you told me you’d got a new job
and this was your final shift.
It might have been your way of letting me know
I had one last chance to ask.
I don’t think it would have worked out, in the end,
but sometimes I wonder.

You were the prettiest girl in the Co-op,
and wherever you are now,
I bet you’re the prettiest girl there too.

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◄ Mrs Sorensen Said

Making Rome Great Again ►

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Karin Seaver

Wed 25th Apr 2018 14:55

Love the story behind this!

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Joe Williams

Fri 1st Sep 2017 13:29

Thanks Steve, glad you liked it!

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steve pottinger

Fri 1st Sep 2017 08:11

That's a great poem, Joe. All the best with the pamphlet!

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Joe Williams

Thu 31st Aug 2017 16:48

Thanks Cynthia!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 31st Aug 2017 15:35

Totally delightful in content and execution, with a free, easy style.

I might repost my Tesco one called'The Single Man'. It always raises a laugh whenever I read it in public.

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Joe Williams

Thu 31st Aug 2017 15:08

Thanks Rob, glad you liked it!

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Robert Mann

Thu 31st Aug 2017 14:22

Joe - a brilliant 'what if' element to this piece. Missed opportunities or misread signals maybe. Love it.
Rob

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Joe Williams

Thu 31st Aug 2017 10:21

And thanks David too. Yes, I like a bit of refelctive nostalgia in poetry, and I find myself putting it into my own work quite a lot. Glad you liked it!

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Joe Williams

Thu 31st Aug 2017 10:19

No I think that was Elvis McGonagall!

Thanks for the comments Colin, glad you liked it.

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Thu 31st Aug 2017 07:28

simple and effective, I love the sausage scanning line and if there were girls like that at my local Co-Op I might be more tempted to shop there!

btw, you weren't the guy who worked down the chip shop who swore he was Elvis by any chance?

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Joe Williams

Wed 30th Aug 2017 21:54

This poem is from my debut pamphlet, 'Killing the Piano', being published in September by Half Moon Books. You can get it from me at any of the gigs I've got coming up (see my profile for the list), or you'll soon be able to get it from my website www.joewilliams.co.uk.

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