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INHALE/EXHALE

Inhaling the chill of the night,

My pace quickens.

I soon realize where I am.

 

Time stops.

 

Exhaling fears, anxiety, stress.

My heart slows.

I notice the sound of a train in the distance.

 

Time resumes.

 

Inhaling the scent of pine tree and oil.

My thoughts race.

I remember the diner just past the railroad tracks.

 

But time stops again.

 

exhaling the memories of you leaving,

My heart drops lower than my self esteem.

I feel my stomach clench from disappointment and hunger.

 

Time resumes once more.

 

Each breath leading to something.

Something I've kept hidden.

I've burried it 6 feet under the smile on my face.

But, leave it to you to dig up your own grave. 

Maybe while you're at it you could dance on mine.

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Duncan McKenzie Ross

Mon 25th Sep 2017 13:39

I thought this started off as a nice night time stroll, then boom, surprise. I enjoyed this very much. Thank You.

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Fri 1st Sep 2017 07:57

I like the way this poem is presented - the inhale / exhale and time start / stopping / pausing / resuming structure accompanied by the distant sound of the train. 'My heart drops lower than my self esteem' is also a great line, the last verse a killer. Thanks for posting. Colin.

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