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Perfume in a lift

          

I smelt your perfume in the lift today,

Felt my cheek brushed by an invisible rose,

Your touch  and your scent, then the doors

Closed like blades ,cutting off that memory

Before my eyes , but worse, leaving as one shred

The hope, un-amputatable as a curse,

That you had just got out one floor below.

 So I press  the button to go down,

The doors slide back once more

I step  out  ,and staring

Down a stale- Sunday dinner- odoured corridor,

Seek a glimpse of you fleeing to the brink

Of the dreary stairwell, coat a-flutter

against the  oblong window, like wings in silhouette.

Hope , like alcohol, is after all, addictive as all ritual,

A mimic joy to decorate despair, a poor pretence.

Still, it was your perfume, and  still

 I challenge all coincidence.

I press the button to go down again.

I step out into another empty hall.

◄ The Taleban are skittin' me Nan

Season\\'s Sonnet ►

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Steve Regan

Tue 15th Dec 2009 15:57

Steve, great tour of sensory perception and human wanting, and of the role of coincidence and timing. I love this line
"Hope , like alcohol, is after all, addictive as all ritual,"
and the killer last two lines...
"I press the button to go down again.
I step out into another empty hall."
Good to see you at the Bards!

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 28th Nov 2009 08:02

Have just discovered your poem and like it very much! A really romantic poem, in the best sense ( or senses - as v sensual) and maybe there's no such thing as a coincidence when you are in love?The word un-amputatable jars a little for me. x

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winston plowes

Sun 22nd Nov 2009 18:49

Steve, a nice moment / story. My favorite words were - coat a-flutter against the oblong window. an enjoyable read. Winston

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Andy N

Fri 6th Nov 2009 21:53

i agree with Cynthia here, m8 and I am the world's worst proof reader.. Good stuff thou!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 6th Nov 2009 14:54

Steve, this poem really connects; love your diction and images, such as the 'wings in silhouette' simile. 'I challenge all coincidence' is a compelling line.

It would be great if you proof-read your posting though.

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