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The Najd

The Najd

 

A landscape commanded by the sun

whose hands manipulate the will of

their master  to create a swirling wind

Craggy rocks wrinkled by fissures 

of heat and wind over many millennia

An undulating sea of shifting sand

a silence imcomparable

No evidence of life

Browns, ochre, yellow and burnt sienna

Lifless, bereft of birds, no echoes heard

A searing sun of merciless might

A sky with no whisper of cloud

a haunting stillness, a curse

to a parched being

yet a source of contemplative wealth

Little to imagine for what can be seen

The night comes as a blanket draped

under a canopy of stars twinkling

in the heavens of creation

Cold takes on the mantle of heat

Day and night require cover

and protection

Flowing robes, partially concealed faces

the garments of the Bedouin

who traverse the forbidden Najd

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keith jeffries

Thu 30th Nov 2017 12:37

Jon, thank you for for latest favourable comments. Much appreciated. Keith

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Jon

Thu 30th Nov 2017 09:06

Hi Keith
So descriptive. I can feel the heat of the sun, the starkness of the landscape. A really well executed poem mate.
Jon

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 27th Nov 2017 11:53

Very atmospheric with splendid imagery. It deserves multiple readings.

I can't be sure whether you like or dislike suggestions or corrections. But, I'll risk it, just because it's so good. And it's 'page poetry'. I think you want 'mantle', a 'covering', as opposed to a 'mantel' over a fireplace. But I could be wrong. It's the closeness of 'blanket' that made me feel you might just have chosen the wrong spelling. I've tried to put both ideas into your particular line and also the general content.

If I'm wrong, be cross with me by all means, and set me straight.

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