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Last Word

 

Were I to write especially for you

Admitting emotions, far before they're due

Were I to feel a longing for your touch

Confessing my sin of wanting it too much

 

A noteworthy charm your messages convey

I can tell that you are smiling as you write to me that way

A playful endeavour as we natter back and forth

Both parts teasing as we equally want more

 

Were I to make verse with you only on my mind

Your soul and mine to be like prose, intertwined

Were I to to harbour certain, hidden sentiment

And mourn the passing time, not together moments spent

 

The glimmer of hope as your latest note arrives

A quiver and a stutter, a fluttering inside

Clutching on to foolish notions of warmth in word embrace

Tracing lines made on paper as though reading lips 'pon face

 

Were I to tell a tale of sorrow, or of woe

It would be consumed, by this warmth of inner glow

Were I to believe for a second this is true

And take the supposition there's more to what I feel for you

 

A ringing in my ears as I listen to your voice

Playback, after playback of unspoken chorus
Carefully choosing wit and imagining your laughter

Auditioning the sentences that lead to happy ever after

 

 

Were I to hold my breath on every silence till it passes

And magnify the longing like pages through these glasses

Were I to ask the questions I'm not sure if I want answered

Fearing that their only pathway is to the final word

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Comments

Frances Macaulay Forde

Thu 26th Apr 2018 09:40

Perhaps I wasn't clear by distracting you with the word 'climax'.

I do understand your point throughout, but the final line doesn't do that point justice or adhere to the cadence.

It is frustratingly close, though.

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RightInTheFeels

Wed 25th Apr 2018 19:19

Thank you Frances.

The expectation of a conclusion which is cut short is kind of the point.

Frances Macaulay Forde

Wed 25th Apr 2018 04:51

I enjoyed this clever composition except for the very final line.

Expecting a climax which didn't come, I do believe you need that 'final word' (line) to be the answer to all your questions.

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RightInTheFeels

Wed 25th Apr 2018 01:39

A narrative if you will on online dating.

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