The Saddest Poem I've Ever Made!

I remember the first day 
I got to hold her like it was yesterday
I let her lie in my bed and gave her my cover
I told myself I wasn't going to sleep that night

But I ended up sleeping beside her
Freezing, my air conditioner was on blasting
I think I woke her up with my chattering teeth

She looked so breath-taking at that moment
She gave me some of the cover and she cuddled me
I'll never forget that moment
Because that was the first time I ever felt happiness

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◄ The Pinkly Demon

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Damon Blackery

Wed 2nd May 2018 15:19

thank's

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 2nd May 2018 12:28

This has charm and honesty, and a real feel for good words. But it also needs a read-through to make sure you are using your verb tenses uniformly.

'She looked so breath-taking ....'

Keep writing; you have flair!

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