The Artist [1]
In so few splashed acrylic lines
see Cornish fishing boats
take shape against the quay
the red hull and the yellow
See Cornish fishing boats
mirrored in the harbour sea
the red hull and the yellow
with the deep sky sunk below
Mirrored in the harbour sea
the jumble of masts and cranes
with the deep sky sunk below
and the distant sea above
The jumble of masts and cranes
hints at larger ships and docks
and the distant sea above
suggests voyages past Pendennis Head
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1. A Malaysian Pantoun which has a distinctive pattern of repeated lines
Chris Armstrong
Fri 11th May 2018 15:55
Thanks, Hannah - it was fun being constrained by the form -glad you thought it worked. To me reading the finished poem, I thought the repetition seems to pull you further in with each verse.