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Chuckling

With a wash, a milky sky,
she is wide awake and at the canvas.

Swallowing an olive or
sipping seawater soup
she's chuckling away 
the hours that pass. 

It's a brightening morning-
she must attempt a blue more intense.
Ultramarine, titanium white?
More, less? One thing for sure -
not everyone can be Rembrandt.

High noon and gold is fierce
as her brush now primed: 
blinding mirror, glinting insect,
shining forehead, chuckling again.

After her Burgundy wine the wind is 
visible in the trees. She'd capture it 
baton-twirling her green brush
eyes closed, chuckling, naturally.

Closer conspiritors now- 
the light and the shade
rise on billowing salmon and flamingo
clouds possible to believe in
through her touch of genius.

At last light sails away 
all of a sudden so quick
she switches to night vision.

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Hazel ettridge

Wed 30th May 2018 15:39

Thanks for the clarification Adam. All makes sense now.

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Adam Whitworth

Wed 30th May 2018 10:57

Thanks for the positive response and comments.

Hazel, it is 'she would' as in 'she longs to'.

Colin, I take your point about the third to last line. I like to think the 'slight stumble' is a realization that multiple interpretations are possible. I strongly believe that where several interpretations could apply all are likely to be relevant. This is one way a poem creates a surrounding buzz for itself. Of course one reading might be the main line and other interpretations mere tributaries but the ambiguities appreciated along the way improve the journey through the poem.

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Wed 30th May 2018 08:20

yes, great poem Adam. I'm seeing Margo Leadbetter in a flowy dress on a painting retreat in Tuscany but I'm also pretty sure there is much to this than that simple image. Very much enjoyed.

I stumbled slightly over the third to last line - wonder if a comma after 'last' would help or change 'At' to 'As'?

Col.

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Hazel ettridge

Wed 30th May 2018 07:59

The chuckling breathes fire into the images in this delightful poem.
I got a bit stuck with 'she'd capture It'. Is it she would capture it or she did capture it? Why move from the present tense? What am I missing?

elPintor

Wed 30th May 2018 02:20

If I could like it twice, I would.

Rachel

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