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Japanese Elvis Impersonators

Who Never Knew The King Wore
Blue Suede Shoes

City Cops Telling Us
To Keep Our Heads Down

There's Nothing Here To See

And Drug Mules Once Traveling
Now Dressed For Death
In Zippered Black Plastic Bags

All Briefly Open Our Eyes To What Once
We Were Blind...

Thru Busy NYC Traffic
We Drifted Sleepily

As The Bremen Town
Musicians Came To Us Singing

Far Away From Broken Homes

Stacked One Upon The Other
Like Nested Eggs Cracked Open

Only To Cast A Passing Glance Into
A Room With A Three-Quarter View

Inside The House That Jack Built...

Even Now, With Sirens Blaring

The Daily Report Swallows The Air With Barely
A Glare From The Passing Commuter

But Inside We Are EnVELoped
And Found Face-Down Inconspicuous

By Furtive Neighbors
When Stray Dogs Come To Linger

And Mottled Doves Blindly
Crash The Windows Of

The Places Where We Once Lived...

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Comments

elPintor

Fri 3rd Aug 2018 00:20

Very kind and gentlemanly of you, Martin, and I don't feel it's patronising at all. I go through bouts of shyness and lulls in confidence and constantly question the validity of what I write at such times. So, it really does mean quite a lot when you say that you look forward to reading.

Thanks again, Martin--always good to hear from you.

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Martin Elder

Thu 2nd Aug 2018 22:51

I feel you have done really well with this Rachel. Hope that didn't sound patronising. But I love it. It is for me and interesting slice of life that cannot access but perhaps pick up from your writing. I always look forward to your posts
wonderful stuff

elPintor

Thu 2nd Aug 2018 12:24

It's quite a thing to admit now, but I'm somewhat dissatisfied with the form of this post. I wanted to try something new but feel like maybe I went a little overboard.

Thanks, all, for reading--maybe I hit something despite my personal sense of being off target.

elPintor

Thu 2nd Aug 2018 02:42

Please forgive...I posted this once in a different form and realized that it seemed to be built upon something that I didn't feel was entirely my own. So, this is basically the same idea cloaked in different language. Who among us has entirely original ideas?

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