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bodies in orbit

..learning to feed on freedom from so much friction again,

I can feel everything starting to slip away already--


I begin to remember that

the first step toward independence

from the mother planet is the hardest

because I've done this before


because even this whiff of moondust is becoming familiar


because, in perspective, this is only really another small step for man...

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◄ a letter to my son--for now...

IS and IS NOT ►

Comments

elPintor

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 20:09

Thanks all for reading and for your comments, David and Martin--I don't know about changing anyone else's world, I only know that I'm determined to change mine.

Rachel

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Martin Elder

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 09:53

I think you sum this up well at the end with
'this is only really another small step for man'

And we do take such small steps in the belief that we should always be world changers

Nice one Rachel

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