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Paralysis

The inhumane hour descends;
argumentative in silent regency, devilish in smooth arcs
of tourmaline, plastering far like a pure weep
with space enough to seduce, it heaps a body
of myths tasting your lips with a muzzled army,

paramount, waiting in strength, listing muscles archaic
with witless blinks, or a pickled amputee, sound-swabbed
and time taut.
Alone, a breath feeds like an angler, scoring fresh from muted waters,
spirited away
and the room beckons.

 

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John Aikman

Mon 18th Jan 2010 19:13

"with witless blinks, or a pickled amputee, sound-swabbed
and time taut."

Lovely line...

The first line makes no sense to me...a mixture of tenses. What's wrong with 'The inhuman hour descends'?

"tasting your lips with a muzzled army" is...well, clever, and...provoking, and...good!

Jx

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 18th Jan 2010 12:03

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