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steel tip toe

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Confident she chews on candy
For a buzz
she takes the randy
Passage
Of the alleyway
At night
Where high heel
Steel tip
Meets urine
And risk
And every crack a skip brisk in paving stone
as Lycra clings to buttock cheek
And leopard print in neon leaps
Out for a second snapshot
Up-skirt view
A close escape from an ageing man
pervert
Forgotten what to do
With it
shame
so she makes her way down steps
To the well lit high street
Past kebab shop games
The mean feat
Of ridicule
And wolf whistle
Bet lynch
And bacon gristle
Calls click click click
She calls
From meathead masters
Backs against the walls
echoes
Or the fronts unzip the small’s
They revellers Take a piss again
18 year old imbeciles
indeed you are minute
and winkle widget
not so cute,  such pencil form
such puny flute indeed!
Speak to the hand
she could show them all a thing or 2!
She, the dancing diva high heeled shoe
a princess
a bobbed hair paint nail glue
nurses dress in black
the strappy heels
she loves the shoes
and sling backs
choice is wide
a fetish thing
shoe shine frenzy
or diamonte cling
on tight
and dazzle
speed it up
adjust and tuck
the tassel…………………. in
Her staccato pace
Accelerates
As she gains confidence
And celebrates her high heel master class
success
Weight on the toe
The balance and brash
echo from walls of stone
2 minutes prayer
At the cash machine throne
Spews cash
Clicks finger commands
Taxi cab , buckle bag fiddles hands fingers
undress
kicked off
feet up, smiling

home

Motor Mouth ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (4281)

Thu 14th Feb 2008 04:54

Hello Lauretta

I must say, you did fantastic job on this write!!
BRAVO!!

Happy Valentine's Day!!
From Zuzanna

<Deleted User>

Sun 10th Feb 2008 22:57

sweethearts! what can I say.
Zuzanna! you hit the nail there with the fantasy and reality ideas. I hoped to paint a picture of the seedy. I think you have seen it...

Clarissa - thanks. Hey I wonder who your friend is....spooky...ok so you have those heels, mmmm they are nice aren't they? I love the height they give...the power.

and Darren Thomas- well you are a Prince charming with your words young man. Well spotted on my multi layers.

I must say the candy metaphor I had not recognised......

thanks guys and girls

<Deleted User> (4281)

Sat 9th Feb 2008 16:37

Lauretta~ The poem does give another thought. It made me bring one more comment. Who has the right to judge anyone about their how they dress and wear the cloths they love. Or better yet the style of their life. So many thinks you have packed in this wonderful write.
Well done!!

darren thomas

Sat 9th Feb 2008 12:50

Ooh, forgot to mention the, or what I perceive as the multilayered writing.
"Confident she chews candy for a buzz..."
Hoorah.

darren thomas

Sat 9th Feb 2008 12:48

I enjoyed this one. Very aware of social prejudice and the idiots who call themselves human.
"Her staccato pace
Accelerates
As she gains confidence
And celebrates her high heel master class
success"
Like this bit especially...

<Deleted User> (4281)

Sat 9th Feb 2008 04:37

Hello Lauretta~ What a wonderful poem this is!
Fantasy mixed witha picture from a real world. The poem hs been excellent as the picture
I imagined looking great. Loved this stanza...Smile.

"A close escape from an aging man
pervert
Forgotten what to do
With it
shame"

The sound of the shoes on the sidewalk...
The fetish you mentioned very intriguing.
Lovely write ,,,GREAT POEM!!

Thank you...Zuzanna

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clarissa mckone

Sat 9th Feb 2008 02:43

HI lauretta,I love the poem and the pic is perfect! I have shoes like that, what fun, and its perfect that they are on top of a mans shirt box.You look much like a friend of mine. Take care Clarissa

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