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Eventual engagement.

Prepare your words well
for this is where you end.
The time has come for you to repent.
Kneel before me, sign your confessions.

I can hear the terror in your voice
and see the resignation in your eyes.
Understand that this is not my choosing.
This is my bidding and i will obey.

This is just your time and no more.
My concern is not your heart
and I will not apologise.
I only want to get through this.

Stop your snivelling and look me in the eye.
Take your inevitability and accept it.
Stand now and draw your last breath.
It's time for you to leave.
 

◄ Dead Wasp

bRAIN RAcING ►

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Andy N

Thu 4th Mar 2010 08:19

i agree with Cynthia.. Death does seem to be a common theme in your poetry. I write poems in this style sometimes myself like of a photograph or a moment (not always about Death however). I did enjoy this however and think the structure is pretty solid. Possibly would be tempted even if it is breaking your structure to give it's time for you to leave a separate to ram the point home.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 3rd Mar 2010 12:42

Very interesting, because it could be almost 'anything' that is recognized as the ultimate calling card. I did find 'terror' and 'resignation' in the same face quite challenging. But no more than 'fear' and 'joy', I suppose.
Death is a common theme in your poetry.

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