over the edge
like comic relief
for the dangerously desensitized
and tragically disaffected
the fate of low entropy and all our chances at
something hoped for, desired yet unexpected
--our ultimate affinity an inglorious end
achieved in the finality of irreversible disorder
Hi Rachel,
I too have read this one quite a few times and love the language. I'm going to read some more... thanks.
Peter T
elPintor
Wed 26th Jun 2019 14:02
Thanks all for your responses.
Hints don't always hit their mark but I find them to be much less messy and tiresome than bludgeons formed of words )
Devon Brock
Tue 25th Jun 2019 21:49
Love the hinted politic of this, Rachel. Well done.
wow what a fabulous poem. I have read it more than a couple of times just to soak up those wonderful words. Its not everyday you get entropy in the line of a poem
Love it Rachel
nice one
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elPintor
Mon 1st Jul 2019 20:00
Thanks, Peter )