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different windows

Beyond the door  

behind your face    

behind the wall

of paper paste

 

twisting hallways 

many rooms 

hidden secrets 

broken rules

 

in this maze

thats all of you

are different windows 

different views 

 

in these views 

you set the scene

the perfect moment 

the perfect dream

 

behind the mask 

the hidden you

masquerading 

to all that view 

 

in your mind 

the film reel rolls

you set the action

in control 

 

but deep within 

your cellar space

in the mirror 

reflects no face

 

and in your eyes 

the myriads float   

of shattered glass 

of mirror broke

🌷(8)

◄ Arid

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Comments

DESMOND CHILDS

Thu 18th Jul 2019 06:18

Thank you Martin, Devon and Don for your kind comments much appreciated. Thank you Rachel, Keith and Liza for the likes, much appreciated.


All the best des

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Don Matthews

Thu 18th Jul 2019 00:30

So clever Desmond. As said by Martin and Devon the rhythm and rhyme is excellent. I particularly like the tight two-beat line rhythm.....

Devon Brock

Wed 17th Jul 2019 22:21

Yes, great use of rhythm and rhyme. I particularly like the opening stanza - the "you" hiding behind the a thin mask. It ties in nicely with "masquerading" later in the poem. I get a sense in this poem that we are all "posers". Which is true, in a way.

D

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Martin Elder

Wed 17th Jul 2019 22:06

You have put rhyme to excellent use in this well crafted poem
Nice one Desmond

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