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'Could've Been

 It could have been us

Celebrating 10th month’s anniversary;

Not that it’s a complaint,

But a reminder in a bragging tone.

 

It could have been us

Laying on a 2m hostel single bed;

Fighting for one pillow,

In a cold night of July.

 

It could have been us

Playing basketball Sunday evening;

On a rough outdoor court,

With rules of our own.

 

It could have been us

Exchanging jerseys on sun dawn;

Watching the sunset,

Talking dirty in love language.

 

It could have been us

If not for your boldness;

That intimidates my manhood,

Pushing me into loving a stranger.

 

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Chihinga Chakatali

Sun 15th Sep 2019 12:30

Thanks Tom

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keith jeffries

Sat 14th Sep 2019 16:48

Lucas,

This is the first poem of yours that I have read. You have real potential.

Keith

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Tom

Fri 13th Sep 2019 16:28

I really like this Lucas, lots of nice touches of detail to make it both intriguing and feel very real. The last verse is particularly strong. Looking forward to reading more of your work - it looks to be right up my street. Tom.

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