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Fireworks

Closed eyelids

Sunlight shining in

A half - opened curtain.

Uncertainty

Confronts the day.

 

Out through the window

People walking

In suits, sunglasses,

Matching scarves.

People I will never meet.

Events that will never happen.

 

The afternoon intrudes

Brutal, reliable.

Because you cannot hide from time.

 

At night there is explosion.

A trip - wire of the mind

Is crossed and set off.

The subliminal thoughts

You thought you forgot

Now become illuminated

In a complex fireworks show.

 

You close your eyes

And the back of your lids light up

You put your head down

And there is a heartbeat in the pillow.

 

Time crawls limbless towards dawn

Slow but resistant

In enhances the blaze

Of fireworks and thoughts.

Then morning returns

Covering the scene in grey.

 

Reset the mines,

Rewire the chord.

The subconscious barrier

Relocated in the brain.

Twenty or so hours remaining

Until a wandering thought

Gets caught in the trap

And the fireworks can begin.

◄ The Linguist.

As The Moon Prevails. ►

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Chris Dawson

Tue 30th Mar 2010 13:08

I agree that the shift in viewpoint character jarrs slightly, and I found myself getting a bit caught on the thought: Can something crawl if it's limbless? But nevertheless - I always enjoy your writing, even if I don't always comment.
Cx

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Andy N

Tue 30th Mar 2010 08:07

i think cynthia raises a interesting point here, kealan.. i too would be interested to see how this would play out done in second person if not in this poem perhaps a sequal..

either way, i did enjoy this with a great ending.. keep em coming!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 29th Mar 2010 21:38

Are you the omniscient writer in this? Maybe it should be second person voice entirely.

In my opinion, it is a strong idea, perhaps needing a strong hand to make it tighter, with culling and more precise diction. Great word play on the title Fireworks.

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