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Bullet proof father

Bullet proof father

Emotion was a prisoner
In fathers world
Rarely shown the light of day
The struggling words
Stumble
How bullet proof are you?
And what harm
And what hurt
And what potential untapped
For keeping warmth within

I know it is in there father
I saw it once
As a child came to expect it
Then nothing delivered
And empty-handed
I became the hollow casket too
Like father like son
Devoid
Without instruction learned
Without the courtyard
Of expression
Without the lesson in love
Nothing
And the birds and bees
Kept deathly silent
And mother suppressed
Vocal violence
Progressed
Father you are bullet-proof
Your shins
solid steel
From school
Your hands crafted tools,
From which you create
Yet words born from feeling
Hidden within
Never resonate these walls
Yet rage or anger seems
Always falling out
As though they boiled over
As though sadness a sediment
May one day it reveal?

Perhaps if I tip you upside down, dad.

◄ the very first wall

the black hole ►

Comments

Pete Crompton

Fri 31st Jul 2009 20:44

Hi thanks!
It was for my schoolfriend John who struggled with his father.

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Francine

Fri 31st Jul 2009 20:41

These lines are very poignant:
'Without the lesson in love
Nothing
And the birds and bees
Kept deathly silent
And mother suppressed
Vocal violence'
says so much... I feel the pain...

Pete Crompton

Thu 21st Feb 2008 23:34

yikes what I mean to say is I do understand it fully.
but parts relate to my life others are my friends lives that i feel. pisceans, it seems take on pain from others and this is a trait of the ol fish sign!

Pete Crompton

Thu 21st Feb 2008 23:33

thanks for your feedback.this poem just appeared in my mind.i don't understand it fully but that's not the point. the poem is for everyone. i feel the subject matter but may or may not have lived it.

once again I feel our best works are typed straight out with almost no alterations. this idea works for my stuff, how about you guys and gals?


thanks

darren thomas

Thu 21st Feb 2008 18:57

Pete - your poem has a sadness to it that is touching. I have an empathy with this poem and would like to think that the answers you're looking for are already inside your writing.
Splendid stuff. The more i read it, the more i can relate to it. Interesting.

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clarissa mckone

Thu 21st Feb 2008 15:10

Hi Peter, This is very nice.

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Thu 21st Feb 2008 14:21

Oh Pete

This is beautiful. I especially love the last line, it could be a poem in itself. As always, your use of questions provokes a profound response from the reader.

A lovely, lovely poem.

Mel

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