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Going to the Country

A half-ploughed field haunted, two tractors abandoned

figure the future; agricultural labour

has paused for a cider and a piss in the ditch,

to puff on a pipe and turn matters over,

late afternoon slumber in the shade of a hedge.

 

The cadence of branches, the rhythm of swaying,

mellifluous birdsong flatters the forest.

Dappled light on a tree stump lends the appearance

of fairy enchantment or deer at a distance;

whistle-blowers heckle notes of discordance.

 

Untrustworthy faces are tacked to the borders,

defacing the country, they shall in their order

grow beards and moustaches, pimples and glasses,

be coloured in every shade of the spectrum;

but it's crosses that count - the plight of the commons. 

 

How long befire birdsong becomes too intrusive

or passes unnoticed like shopping mall music

and trees, grown too tall for bowing and scraping,

snatched from the breach between earth and its ceiling,

groan and snap for the good of the greater number?

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 18th Apr 2010 19:34

I don't get the word haunted, but the first verse is wonderfully evocative.

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Greg Freeman

Sat 17th Apr 2010 09:10

These lines, Ray, are I think particularly well crafted:

"agricultural labour/has paused for a cider and a piss in the ditch,/
to puff on a pipe and turn matters over,/late afternoon slumber in the shade of a hedge."

Real music there

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 17th Apr 2010 06:51

I like this. I really love the first two verses, even though I can see that the "point" of the poem is made in the last two. I guess bucolic imagery wins over politics in my own personal general election any day of the week. xx

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Julian (Admin)

Fri 16th Apr 2010 19:12

Gentle bucolic imagery, with a hint of menace. Nice one.

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