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raypool

Fri 20th Oct 2017 11:35

Sorry to be late back Suki - all's well thanks for asking. That hay fever is a bummer; I started to get it and now take cider vinegar every day , failing that local honey. Worked a treat for me . I love the light variation in spring and autumn!
Dr. Pool.

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keith jeffries

Fri 20th Oct 2017 11:32

Thanks Jon. Love you lots :Keith

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David Taylor-Jones

Fri 20th Oct 2017 10:55

Thanks Laura - I came away from the gig knowing I had to catch it somehow!

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Lan

Fri 20th Oct 2017 10:15

This is lovely, I have nothing else to say, but a like didn’t seem enough

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David R Mellor

Fri 20th Oct 2017 09:53

Thanks Phil , and yes it is

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David R Mellor

Fri 20th Oct 2017 09:52

Thanks alot Phil , very pleasing , cheers

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David R Mellor

Fri 20th Oct 2017 09:49

big thanks Tom , glad it hit a cord , cheers

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Laura Taylor

Fri 20th Oct 2017 09:39

Nice one Helen! ? Lovely poem and a very worthy winner. So glad you're back with us for a while ?

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Laura Taylor

Fri 20th Oct 2017 09:36

Great idea for a poem! You capture the night well. I've seen Damo Suzuki several times, and he always manages to make me lose my shit ? Also lucky enough to catch a jampacked gig at a festie a few years ago by System 7.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 20th Oct 2017 09:32

She'll go back to education, get a degree, or go travelling, or open a donkey sanctuary, or work with the homeless, or any number of things, and hopefully gain a sense of self/identity that doesn't revolve around being an object ?

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Laura Taylor

Fri 20th Oct 2017 09:24

Cheers chaps ? Just trying to cheer myself up in the midst of writing a string of miserable poems!

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Laura Taylor

Fri 20th Oct 2017 09:21

Hi Philip

Thank you for your recent remarks on my page. Weirdly enough, I did a poem in January 2012 with the same title. I'm not gonna blog it but here it is:

WALK TO THE SHOPS

Slip into the sprinkle of a drizzle-filled day
Plastic bag crisp in hand, aiming for the shops
Feet to floor
Pavement pound
Carry on
Past the step
yellow tread
bearing Bulmers: lippy-stained
halfway drained
Pavement decorated in
a strange shade of sick

J’arrive at ‘The Parade’!
The Mean Street of Thatto Heath
Stench of piss and pizza
wraps itself around my mouth
as I kick along the papers
that cradled last night’s chips
Pit-shaved grinning princess,
billboarded, looks down
From within her perma-tan, she oozes
anonymity
Blinding me with bleachy teeth and peachy poreless face

I hope to fuck my DNA does not contain that kind of clean

Feet to floor
Pavement pound
Past the bus stop;
betting shop;
fag shop; tat shop;
takeaway; SALON;
takeaway; TANNING;
takeaway, takeaway;
CHIPPY.
Luckily:
‘health advice for minor conditions’ -
free inside the pharmacy

There’s no water in the fridges of the takeaway shops
And I didn’t want pop. They looked at me weird.
Social pariah, for wanting water.

Feet to floor
Pavement pound
Homeward bound
Past the salon
Chip fat alley
Tan tat fag bet bus
Ministering pharmacist
Past the step
yellow tread
Bulmers gone
Small red shoe there now instead
… wonder who..?
Tiny tatty lone red shoe
Torn too. Wonder if she’s..?
Nearly home
Nearly there
Rid my mouth of piss and murk
Home from hell on earth
a walk to the shops
and a musing or four
And then I recall
I forgot
what?
I went for



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Fri 20th Oct 2017 09:04

some groan out loud one liners in there David and all good fun. Thanks for posting and good luck with the therapy. Col.

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Fri 20th Oct 2017 08:50

agree with Suki but it needs another verse and a chorus to make it a top ten hit pop pickers. I've probably posted this link before but it's worth (IMO) posting again and your poem reminded me of it. Both lovely. Thanks. Col.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CkCn7jF7hnE

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Fri 20th Oct 2017 08:40

you can feel successful now Eric ?

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Fri 20th Oct 2017 08:31

more like Flying Teapot David!

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Tom Doolan

Fri 20th Oct 2017 08:12

Hi Andy - very amusing. "There's nowt so queer as folk" - T?

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Dominic James

Fri 20th Oct 2017 08:07

I'm glad you posted this Steven, I picked up "Your Name Here" a week or two ago, second hand just on Ashberry's name, your essay is a timely guide in. Looking forward to it now, an approach prepared.
Dom.

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Tom Doolan

Fri 20th Oct 2017 07:59

Hi Colin - I spent a couple of days there. Stayed just off the Plaza de la Reina. Pleased that I evoked some mostly positive memories for you. Thanks for your feedback. Gracias. T?

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David Taylor-Jones

Fri 20th Oct 2017 07:47

Thanks for your comments Suki, much appreciated

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lynn hahn

Fri 20th Oct 2017 05:29

Thank you

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Fri 20th Oct 2017 05:20

Absolutely agree with every comment here.
Very clever and well done, Ian.

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Fri 20th Oct 2017 04:57

I think we've all felt like that! Ha-Ha!

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suki spangles

Fri 20th Oct 2017 04:54

Cheers fellas!

Ray, you are very kind. I packed a lot in, hoping it will at least put a smile on the reader's face. Thanks again.

David - the new Blade Runner film is out now. I understand that the original is based on Do Androids dream of Electric Sheep, although the novel had the usual PKD humour running through. I love his stuff. What a compliment!

SS

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suki spangles

Fri 20th Oct 2017 04:34

Hi Ray,

This could also be a great lyric. While I was reading this I "heard" an acoustic guitar playing along..

Suki

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suki spangles

Fri 20th Oct 2017 04:30

Nice write David. really enjoyed this - wonderful descriptive imagery.

Suki

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Chris Hubbard

Fri 20th Oct 2017 01:23

Hi Frances,

I'm home in WA at the moment, after seven months (whew!) away but I will be back in the UK early-ish in the New Year. The fact is that I have always hankered after a visit to Ireland, but never quite made it. This gives the perfect final "push" to do just that!

Many thanks,

Chris

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raypool

Fri 20th Oct 2017 00:07

My pleasure Philip - precious times that conjure up misspent? youth. Cheers. I'm old enough to remember pre decimal coinage.

Ray

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Philip Stevens

Thu 19th Oct 2017 22:25

I remember penny arcades just memories now which you've brought back with your words ... your a man at the top of his odes Ray..

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raypool

Thu 19th Oct 2017 22:22

HI Mark. I remember the little brown bags with the perforated tops, all very serious kit. Thanks for commenting.

Very nice Tony that you enjoyed this; it wasn't designed to be serious, obviously but then it's nice to flex the memory muscles no and again. The idea of the hand just came to me. It's what drives the hand that makes the millionaires.

That photograph has such a memorable look to it , a sort of deep blankness for me. Thanks a lot.

Thanks Kevin. Britannia was always on the back of the old pennies , a reminder of the Empire. Useful also for putting on railway lines!

Thanks for the like Col. Hope you are well, mate. Thanks too Philip!

Ray

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Philip Stevens

Thu 19th Oct 2017 22:18

Just to echo the comments above keith, youve encapsulated how at times, the mind ebbs away, then " Regeneration revitalises" and flows again ...

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Philip Stevens

Thu 19th Oct 2017 22:09

Soul bearing stuff thanks for sharing

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David Taylor-Jones

Thu 19th Oct 2017 20:58

Perfect Colin - another Pot Headed pixie!

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Jane C. Steele

Thu 19th Oct 2017 20:49

Hi Laura
I understand the reasoning behind #metoo, I just don't find it a very positive exercise. I appreciate others may, we all cope in different ways.
Good luck with the funny poem, I think I probably need to write one too.
All the best Jane

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kJ Walker

Thu 19th Oct 2017 20:16

I've never heard of pennies being referred to as Britannia discs.
I enjoyed this nice bit of nostalgia
?

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Philip Stevens

Thu 19th Oct 2017 20:13

Just read walk to the shops on David r mellor
Blog street scene... you got that recorded.. you would drliver it with real verve

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Philip Stevens

Thu 19th Oct 2017 20:03

Familar scenes in towns and citys..liked the delivery

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Philip Stevens

Thu 19th Oct 2017 19:52

Loved listening to this briillantly delivered

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Thu 19th Oct 2017 19:35

I stayed in the old part of Valencia for a month or so some many years ago and have very fond memories of the city plus ones of almost being mugged by gypsies and watching the druggies try to steal the cassette radio from my VW Beetle. Fortunately neither succeeded. Thanks for sending me back to that time with this poem Tom. Col.

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Thu 19th Oct 2017 19:28

you have me reaching for my old Gong LP's David ?

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Chris Hubbard

Thu 19th Oct 2017 15:58

Thanks to both Graham and Frances.

I wrote this poem many years ago, and it remains one of my "old friends," as I like to call them. The Jarrah and Karri forests of the South West, and the coastline from Busselton around to Cape Leeuwin (and far beyond) are as majestic and glorious as anything I've seen elsewhere.

Chris

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Tom Doolan

Thu 19th Oct 2017 15:31

A very poignant piece David - Give and you shall receive. T?

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Nigel Astell

Thu 19th Oct 2017 15:12

Thanks to all those that liked When the Tables are Turned

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Ryn

Thu 19th Oct 2017 14:29

Very good I really enjoyed it.

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Duncan McKenzie Ross

Thu 19th Oct 2017 13:51

Sweeeeeeeeeeeet?

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David Taylor-Jones

Thu 19th Oct 2017 13:34

Keep fighting!

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Tom Doolan

Thu 19th Oct 2017 13:22

Well said Lynn. T ?

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Tom Doolan

Thu 19th Oct 2017 13:19

Nice one Laura - You will go down fighting. T ?

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Thu 19th Oct 2017 12:58

Hi Chris,
I don't know if you're at home in WA at the moment or visiting UK as you've said you will be doing both regularly.
So I wondered if you find yourself in Ireland or the Cliffs of Moher may I recommend you pop into a lovely little bookshop near there: https://www.facebook.com/TheSalmonBookshopLiteraryCentre/
If you have time and she's in - introduce yourself to Jessie Lendennie who also runs Salmon Poetry: http://www.salmonpoetry.com/about-salmon.php
She's mentioned she'd love to meet more WA poets and please give her my best regards. ?

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Thu 19th Oct 2017 12:47

Yes, gorgeous writing. ?

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