I love it ?

Comment is about Honey sweet honey (blog)

Original item by G.N.D.

i am transported exactly where you want me to be, then my scene is broken by the damn mosquito. a clever piece, quite jarring.

Comment is about Above My Home (blog)

Original item by New Shoes

this is excellent. those opening two lines are beautiful and the pace and skill doesnt let off. i really enjoyed this.

Comment is about Wearing Thin (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

thanks graham! i do like to baffle, although i always hope some of the meaning comes through

the headings refer to the various stages of a japanese tea ceremony, and the piece itself is the distillation of sitting down for a cuppa and just having a chat.

four score and twenty has no relevance other than it is a long time!

i was hoping to juxtapose the languid pace of the tea ceremony with the seemingly endless time it can take to speak the truth, get things off your chest.

i hope that helps a bit, and thanks for reading!

edit - having read your comment again i fear i may have over-explained myself. either way, i'm glad the poem stirred something, anything, within you.

Comment is about ceremony (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Having spent some time googling the headings I think I like Hakobi Temae the best. It seems to fit in with the gentleness of the etiquette suggested.

Four score and twenty?

I cannot detect the relevance of Ryurei

Christ I wish I knew what was going through your head when you wrote this. As shoes says, it sounds cool but who for?

Good work Stu.......I think! ?

Comment is about ceremony (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

thanks guys.

you know colin, i genuinely couldnt think of a title for it so just wrote anything at the time, and i dislike it too. i think i will change it to 'ceremony' as that is at least relevant to the poem!

cheers for the interest, as ever.

Comment is about ceremony (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

enjoying your writing Michaela.

Comment is about Violent Verdict (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

deep sighs all round - you put into words a lot of my feelings - like how much time do we invest in certain things as we get older and is there any point.

Poetry for the ponderers.

Col

Comment is about AIMS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I love the concept behind this Stu, very clever and well thought out - intelligent poetry without falling into the trap of being utterly soulless and boring.

I think the poem is excellent but I don't get the need for such a long title which seems only to mock the poem. I don't understand and suspect I'm missing something.

Col.

Edit: exploring the positive / negative or spacial / interval concept of 'Ma'?

Comment is about ceremony (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

I can't agree more Wendy.
Birds sing from the heart. They don't need an audience.
Nobody judges a bird's singing. They bring immense joy to us in the morning.

Thank you for that.
Raj

Comment is about No Words Needed (blog)

Original item by Wendy Higson

that was awesome, I don't think I understood any of it but it was cool. It sounded like a cycle of evolution in many and mini ways

Comment is about ceremony (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

I'm glad you liked it Kitty.

Take care.
Raj x

Comment is about See you up there at love o'clock (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

That's spooky Kitty. Strangely enough that was a significant line for me too. The turning point in any relationship.

Stay connected!

Comment is about Our Divine Dance (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

M.C.
in 1945 I was a young lad working in a tobacco factory when the good news came over the radio...and a guy (who
was fully into the spirit of the thing) began to toss two hundred cartons of cigs out of a window into the street outside in a surge of absolute joy.

Sadly, he was stopped by a sour security guy with no sense of true patriotism whatsoever.

(absolutely true)

Comment is about THE VIEW FROM HERE (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

.as I said this is a particularly powerful poem full of raw emotion and u excellently use language to convey the feelings of poem.... But I think if u play around wiv structure..... Layout... That could further improve what is already a very polished poem
Just a suggestion...... Play around wiv the structure of the first part..... Maybe have first half.... Broken up.... Create confusion.... Lost. Loneliness build to a flowing calmness for blue writing

I wanted death.

I wanted to leave.


I wanted to give up.


It was like driving

down the interstate when it's raining.

Hard.

And

you're terrified

Because

you can't even see the end

of the hood of your car

Let alone the road in front of you.

You feel lonley

You don't know if there's anyone else

there on the road

You don't know if you're gonna

crash

into anyone.

Lightning strikes

It almost kills you.

You don't know how far you've made it

And you want to

stop.

You want to
.
turn around

and
.
go home.

But you just keep moving.

Comment is about bridges. (blog)

Original item by m.k.

This is a really emotive poem.... Very well written..... And very very hard to read cos it so full of feeling.... I love how u compare inner turmoil to pathetic fallacy of a storm.... And the metaphoric comparison of life journey to a car journey ...... Just a thing to try.... May be consider structure... Esp at start I'd have broken down red lines to be stood alone .. Making poem slower and more lost.... But excellent work.... Very good

Comment is about bridges. (blog)

Original item by m.k.

Hey Stu, thanks for your comment on 'The Roast'. It means a lot. Keep up the good work yourself! DB.

Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)

Original item by Stuart Buck

A very clear descriptive imagery here to create the scene of bygone times.... And the emphasis of power of sound.... Radio...... I still listen radio every day on way home from work and write my own radio scripts which I gunnar try to get radio slot for publication

Comment is about Radio Play (blog)

Original item by David Blake

lovely haiku

Comment is about The Long Slug (blog)

Original item by CathyLCrabb

Thanks for your comments on 'The Roast' Ray...a pleasure to hear your take, as always. DB.

Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)

Original item by ray pool

all we can be is the best we can be

Comment is about AIMS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

the day i have to see theresa may on her knees is the day i give up for good. great stuff and thanks for putting that fucking tune in my head all night...

Comment is about Mrs May's Farmyard (to the tune of Old McDonald) (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Mafioso only more so; the DUP were made an offer they couldn't refuse.. or was it the other way round. I'm not an expert. A nice sardonic set of lines Laura.

Ray

Comment is about Mrs May's Farmyard (to the tune of Old McDonald) (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Hi Robert, I like your "Late evening capitalism" too.

Enjoying reading your poems, thanks.

Comment is about Laughter (blog)

Original item by Robert C Gaulke

Fantastic.

Comment is about Lost & Found (And Other Myths) (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Thanks for the comments Phillip!

Comment is about Blue Silk (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

Very effective syntax
and structure gives this poem emotive tension

Comment is about My Single Mother (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

Some very powerful imagery and metaphors in this poem comparing your features appease to the natural outdoor landscape

Comment is about Blue Silk (blog)

Original item by Michaela Sheldon

M.K. This stream of consciousness moves me on a really deep level. It's not just your generation, it's been 33 years since I was a teenager but your work tells almost word for word how I felt.
You have a real talent. I love to see how your writing helps you. I find that too. I have written as a way of helping myself since I was young and lately it has been my escape as well as my journal. Keep writing, your talent will blossom.
Louise x

Comment is about sleep deprived teen angst. (aka, sad jumbled b/s i wrote after staying up all night) (blog)

Original item by m.k.

Anyone might think that "Remainer" May's pre-Brexit visits
to Brussels and her extraordinary u-turn over holding an
election was the result of EU advice about how to lose
Brexit impetus but still hang on to power (just) - now
referred to as "The Remainers' Revenge". Governments
and Parliament in my adult lifetime have shown themselves
remarkably compliant to being run from beyond these shores and even "No, no, no" Thatcher eventually fell victim
- with the Common Market a very distant memory by then and all manner of treaties agreed and signed in our name
without any reference whatsoever to the electorate in
the process. All the recent stuff
about "parliamentary sovereignty" overseeing the Brexit procedures
has a very hollow ring when recalling how it was shunted aside
in the past when it really mattered.

Comment is about Mrs May's Farmyard (to the tune of Old McDonald) (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

*high fives Laura*

??

Comment is about Mrs May's Farmyard (to the tune of Old McDonald) (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

*high fives Ian*

??

Comment is about Lost & Found (And Other Myths) (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Well, he had me welling right up - brilliant speech, with all that emphasis on the arts (poetry mentioned at least 5 times) and anti isms, all for an equal society. Never thought I would actually hear it being said out loud by a Labour politician ever again, and it does my heart good.

Comment is about 'Ye are many - they are few!' Jeremy Corbyn quotes Shelley at Glastonbury (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

heard in an interview he likes the stone roses but isnt too keen on the foofighters

'for the mani - not the foo'

Comment is about 'Ye are many - they are few!' Jeremy Corbyn quotes Shelley at Glastonbury (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Your message of fair play and justice is relentless Wendy.
Well done. Whilst a lot of people sit on the fence you have the courage of your conviction to express your beliefs.

Raj

Comment is about Shameful (blog)

Original item by Wendy Higson

Love your poem, John. Never realised Colin Waldron -
a name I'd forgotten - played for United as well as Chelsea. Thanks for the FB heads-up that led me submitting some poems to this wonderful anthology, including one about my mother-in-law's lifelong love for Ross County. Just received my copy in the post today - it's beautifully produced, and I'm very, very proud to be in it. Just hope my mother-in-law likes the poem!

Comment is about Remember that game: football anthology launched in aid of Alzheimer Scotland project (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

keep on keeping on Wendy.Have you seen Rose Casserleys poem dedicated to you? Thank you.Jemima.

Comment is about Shameful (blog)

Original item by Wendy Higson

Just a thought, if Jeremy really wanted to be taken seriously at Glasto he should have formed a band.

What name though? I'll kick you all off

The Corbyn Minority.....?

Jerry Cans......?

etc etc

Comment is about 'Ye are many - they are few!' Jeremy Corbyn quotes Shelley at Glastonbury (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks Col and Suki. Yes, Bennett at large. I'll try this live next week and try not to laugh myself! I'm a giggler .

Ray

Comment is about AUNT NORA (blog)

Original item by ray pool

As new profiles meeter and greeter I'll let you all know when Jeremy joins WOL!

Comment is about 'Ye are many - they are few!' Jeremy Corbyn quotes Shelley at Glastonbury (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks Laura x

Comment is about 'The Concrete Road' by Becky Sowray is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

or Kate Tempest

Comment is about 'Ye are many - they are few!' Jeremy Corbyn quotes Shelley at Glastonbury (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

I'm more than disappointed that Theresa May hasn't done Glasto. She could at least have introduced Radiohead..

Comment is about 'Ye are many - they are few!' Jeremy Corbyn quotes Shelley at Glastonbury (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hi Phillip, thank you for stopping by and commenting on my poems. I'm glad you enjoyed them and I am grateful to receive your feedback. Emer?

Comment is about Phillip Kelly (poet profile)

Original item by Phillip Kelly

So a political leader quotes Shelley on stage to thousands of people and WOL lines up to sneer at it.

You've got to love 'poets'.

Comment is about 'Ye are many - they are few!' Jeremy Corbyn quotes Shelley at Glastonbury (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hey, what's up, guys?

..here in the States, exhausting what's left of the weekend on gin and soda...

As I was writing this, I began to recall bits of stories told of Allied agents dropped into Axis territories during WWII. Though, I admit, it began only as an illustration of an attempt at reinvention as an introduction to a new place.

Oft' times, we must remember that, not only, is the land and its inhabitants strange to us--but, we are also strange to it. And, each of us have, what may seem, much to defend against the encroachment of unfamiliar--maybe even novel--ideas.

It's good to hear from you, Stu and Suki, and to delve below the skin of the superficial with your insights.

elP

Comment is about the parachutist (deployed) (blog)

Original item by nunya

goodnight Phillip,and thanks again.



Rose ?

Comment is about Phillip Kelly (poet profile)

Original item by Phillip Kelly

A very powerful poem about life and aging..... Very effective imagery to describe the harshness bleakness of getting old

Comment is about Bittersweet (blog)

Original item by Cait Abbott

Go on Kevin I am sure you can. Thanks both for your lovely words of encouragement. X

Comment is about The Path (blog)

Original item by Louise Clarke

The survivors of the Grenfell Tower disaster would agree with your last sentiment wholeheartedly, MC.

Comment is about 'Ye are many - they are few!' Jeremy Corbyn quotes Shelley at Glastonbury (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman