Hey - could be! If that really is the explanation, that would be fantastic, although not immediately obvious to every reader.

Comment is about A RESTORER'S LOT (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thank you for the comment, Dazzer. M:)

Comment is about He’s a Drunk (blog)

Original item by Michelle

And so did I. And my dad.

Proper choked up now. Great poem, really good.

Comment is about And the Walls did Weep (blog)

Original item by Jim Trott

Thank you Laura for your generous comment on 'Shapeless days and nameless nights'. I'm pretty chuffed that you liked it.
M:)

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Love love love this. I am currently caught up in the maelstrom that is looking after an elderly dad complete with care system cock-ups, and this rings lots of bells for me.

Another wonderful story, well told.

ps - from early childhood, I basically lied to everyone about my every move, thought and action for YEARS in order to preserve a basic privacy. That also rang bells with me, though its premise is different to Tom's.

I don't always get the time to comment on poems, but when I do I will. You are one I will be keeping an eye on :)

Comment is about Tom's Battles (blog)

Original item by Jim Trott

Thank you for the very kind comments on Puthering Laura!

Puthering, that's a real word eh? In my childhood household it was a term for any seemingly chaotic action, quote my mother:

"that flour is just puthering all over the shop"


Graham

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Yep, I loved the mundane/crisis/mundane shifts too, and it's the kind of thing that poets do really notice. Love the image of the magpie trying to retain some dignity, and the narked robin :D Tied up with your little wry 'who, me?' line at the end, and we have one of the best things you've written for a while Cynth :) Nice one :)

Comment is about Wind from my Window (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

this dragged me in michelle, i think it was the description of the locked knee that got me and at that point i knew it wasnt going to be a happy poem. great stuff on a sad subject
dazzer

Comment is about He’s a Drunk (blog)

Original item by Michelle

Something I kept meaning to ask you about Ray is your use of indents. I'm not sure what they add to the poems. I enjoyed this one with its twist at the end, but am puzzled as to the significance of the indented lines.

Comment is about A RESTORER'S LOT (blog)

Original item by ray pool

It really is full of riches, as Greg says. This has to be one of THE most evocative poems I've ever read. It has actual texture, smell, and sound, combined with the wisdom of 'all things shall pass'.

This line "it shall vanish from the library of within" makes me ache it's that poetic.

Fantastic, you should be very proud and happy with this poem. From one poet to another, I pay you this compliment: I wish I had written it :)

Comment is about A Place Like a Poem (blog)

Original item by Chandana

Oh Michelle, I absolutely love this! The title/last line is so fine - such a lovely sound and feeling to it, and scenes you lay out for us - well, I'm there, right there inside them.

Wonderful piece. And a beautiful touch of letting go, right at the end.

Comment is about Shapeless days and nameless nights (blog)

Original item by Michelle

Powerful poem

Comment is about THE TREE (blog)

Original item by christine yates

This is a poem full of riches. I love "rickety-rackety with family", and the way the lines conjure up so many pictures.

Comment is about A Place Like a Poem (blog)

Original item by Chandana

agreed. this is gorgeous. i love spices in poetry, they are wonderfully evocative.

on line 14 'bpoys' should be 'boys'.

i'm there with you, in your place and in the emotions you transfer through the page. brilliant stuff, the first poem ive read today and a fine way to start!

Comment is about A Place Like a Poem (blog)

Original item by Chandana

Hi Chandana

This is a beautiful poem which I really enjoyed. I could almost smell the incense and spices.

I love the reflective sadness, and was shaken by the almost casual acceptance that the cherished memories will fade.

Lovely, lovely poem.

Comment is about A Place Like a Poem (blog)

Original item by Chandana

your comments means much... thank you.... its great to have a venue where people... actually 'GET IT"

peace

Comment is about I AM AFRAID (blog)

Original item by GeeProcessor

Yes, from Bangalore. Thank you.

Comment is about Nameless (blog)

Original item by Chandana

I really enjoyed these lines. I came back to read them a couple times now. Great stuff.
I Have Wept
Fasted
Wept
and
Prayed
I am No Prophet
Yet
Upon Platter
I Have Seen
My Head

Comment is about I AM AFRAID (blog)

Original item by GeeProcessor

This poem really resonates with me having suffered panic attacks anxiety flash backs oh that tthe ghost would stay in the closet or is that the skeletons . ( : x

Comment is about Haunted (blog)

Original item by Pauliegreg

it's good news that the death sentence has been lifted

even if the remaining punishment is incredibly severe

Comment is about Poet reprieved from execution but still faces 800 lashes and long jail term (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks Greg , I'm glad you enjoyed the sleaze! A good night , and a tough spot to go on first but upwards and onwards.

Ray

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

F**k the government indeed - oops just swore x I like your poetry Tommy and you said it first in your Biography x

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

This is brilliant.

We find ourselves shifting from the mundane drawing of the curtains to the making of the tea, and in between experiencing the sudden storm in all of its glory.

I love those shifts, and the wonderful imagery

Comment is about Wind from my Window (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Vicki
The crux of the haiku form is there, the correct syllabic content and you have even put the 'pivot' line in the middle. A fine first attempt!

Comment is about Your Words (Haiku) (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

this is fine indeed! the main bother i have with the winds here in the valleys are that they are so strong whenever we have them the cats refuse to go out and do their business so i end up with litter trays everywhere. anyway, such musical language and phrasing. a nice snapshot and i can see you writing it, which gives it extra charm.

Comment is about Wind from my Window (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Martin - apologies - I missed your kind comments regarding 'I Am The Scarecrow' - pleased that you liked it and thanks for commenting
Ian

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thanks all for commenting. Although I must admit I was not expecting any as it was a 'drifting off' few lines that I knew I would not remember in the morning so popped them directly on here.

Anita you have earned yourself a packet of chocolate hob nobs to dunk with our next brew for your lovely and very generous comment about my scribble. This is based on something one of my new work colleagues said to me which did make me laugh out loud. Don't think the poor souls know what to make of me but they are adjusting very well under the circumstances.

I totally agree, David.

Thanks again Vicky and keep up the good work.

XXX

Comment is about normal (blog)

Enjoyed hearing this last night at the Keystone, Ray. "Sony this and sony that" is one of my favourite lines ... plus scrubbing out the old Cortina with toilet cleaner, of course.

Comment is about THAT WAS THE SEVENTIES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I empathize with those words...

Comment is about Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Taylor

Enjoyed the 'feel' of this one David.P&S. xx

Comment is about River (blog)

Original item by David Blake

I thought I had put a comment here before. I absolutely LOVE this. I could never write in this way; (I don't think - but, then, I've never tried.) Anyway, I so enjoy your work, for itself, and also, because you stretch me.

Comment is about Anthony and Katypatra (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

Hi Cynthia, You have so much going on in this poem, all cleverly described and entwined, I love it. I especially like the "puppy neck-wrestling a rag doll", and my favourite bit "specimens pinned to the sky board" - both perfect images! M:)

Comment is about Wind from my Window (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Oh, how sad. On his own, lonely, staring at the walls. Beautifully told.
M:)

Comment is about And the Walls did Weep (blog)

Original item by Jim Trott

Lynn, this made me laugh out loud, probably cos I know you so well! Love your poetry and your so abnormal personality!

Comment is about normal (blog)

Thank you both for your comments - yes Wolfie I like that - thrashing (almost like that better than spiralling!) but yes the idea being its the 'flowers' tanacity keeping it the whirlpool of its own making. I also like your suggestion Cynthia - but it has an entirely different meaning that way - somehow sadder - thanks again xx

Comment is about Aftermath (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Yes me too!! Who the hell WANs to be 'normal'!! Nice one xx

Comment is about normal (blog)

No! That's the first I've heard of Paul kantner passing away. Airplane were great, Cheers David.

Comment is about PAUL KANTNER (blog)

Original item by David Subacchi

You can find more of my poetry on line simply by searching on my name.

Comment is about PAUL KANTNER (blog)

Original item by David Subacchi

Thanks, David. I've just watched the clip and it relates very well. Thanks for the link. PJH is an exceptional talent and well worthy of promotion! X

Comment is about Sweet Heart (blog)

Thanks all, hic

Comment is about Killing the Long Game (blog)

Original item by Jim Trott

I find a flowing lovely lyricism describing/capturing harsh physical reality or a poignant metaphor of great love, whether religious or human. I admire/applaud the care taken in structure.

Comment is about River (blog)

Original item by David Blake

Having put words on both the printed page and via the
CD format at my own expense, the pleasure is having
them in permanent formats - with the added luxury of
calling the shots as far as pricing and promotion is concerned.
The "value" is very much a personal thing as this is
basically a product and if you are in search of a market
for it, you will need to be open minded, patient and adaptable when seeking your public.
I once put an ad. as a "gift" item in a quality magazine
at some expense and got no replies at all. But there is
some truth in "You have to speculate to accumulate",
even if it's just recovering outlay.
Self-publication has an honourable tradition and shows
confidence in one's own efforts.
Good luck - whatever!

Comment is about First poetry collection nearly ready (blog)

Original item by David Addington

Thank you Cynthia : )

Taking on board your comment, have posted a re-draft of The Temptation of St Anthony to try and de-mystify it a little!

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Or a "hole for one" in some distant windswept northern golf course, perhaps?!
:-)

Comment is about DONALD THE ELEPHANT (TRUMP TRUMP TRUMP) (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Interesting that Wolfgar makes this comment, because my first reaction was to eliminate the 'whirlpool' line entirely, leaving the 'flower' image in its 'muddy waters of life.' Just an opinion, of course, with respect.

Comment is about Aftermath (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Yvonne - where have you been? This piece is very illuminating for we mere men. The invisible bond between mother and child, which can only be germinated in the womb. We can only marvel at a connection we can not come close to.
Let's have less gaps in your postings please.
Rob

Comment is about THE BIRTH (blog)

Original item by Yvonne Brunton

I do enjoy the almost casual style you write in, the words and sense of what you're saying flow easliy. I absotivley agree with your thoughts on this one.
M:)

Comment is about Killing the Long Game (blog)

Original item by Jim Trott

Love it! And it's nearly always the guitarist who feeds back, in my experience!

Comment is about Feedback (blog)

Original item by Anna Ghislena

That's lovely, Michelle. I could almost hear the sea!

In fact, I think I'll pop down to the beach now.........

Jim

Comment is about Shapeless days and nameless nights (blog)

Original item by Michelle

Michelle - this piece is truly dreamy, but it feels like the main protagonist is struggling to find release from some pain or suffering. I am sure this means many different things to many different people. Well written Michelle.
Rob

Comment is about Shapeless days and nameless nights (blog)

Original item by Michelle