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Steve Regan

Thu 6th Jun 2013 14:13

Great poem by Carol Ann ... with a killer last line, turning a cliche into something profound.

I can understand why it might get a cool reception from contemporary poets, mind, as they are generally left-leaning (nowt wrong with that; I am so myself) and also (often) bitterly anti-Royal Liberal Fascists!

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Ian Whiteley

Thu 6th Jun 2013 13:35

'clear blue air' is classic Laura - describes that feeling perfectly - 'beghilos' is very good too - those bloody calculators eh - spent many an hour messing with them when I should have been learning maths :-)
"separated at birth" I think I would have got the better deal out of that Laura - unless you want to double your body weight and take a wack or two with the ugly stick :-)

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Laura Taylor

Thu 6th Jun 2013 12:45

Aye, it really must be an age thing. And economic too, almost certainly - it is more expensive now than it's ever been apparently.

Ha - maybe we were separated at birth?! I wrote a poem about needing to be alone a couple of years ago - link here. Its alternative title is 'Just Shut The FUCK Up!' ;D

http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=24466

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Ian Whiteley

Thu 6th Jun 2013 12:24

thanks for the comments on 'domestosterone' Laura - glad you liked it - 'teak' it must be an age thing - bring back teak references I say :-)a much underused wood.
Just seen your comments on another post about social/crowds/parties etc - knowing what I know about your OCD and now this, I think you must be the female version of ME!totally got your comments about 'alone time' - you just need to start referencing 'teak' more and you'll be there :-)

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Laura Taylor

Thu 6th Jun 2013 11:51

Ha - excellent, loved this! Beautifully evocative from the outset, that first verse is fantastic.

I really like how you build it up - was with you all the way :D You should see me play air hockey - I turn into a complete animal. Gets proper dangerous! :D

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Laura Taylor

Thu 6th Jun 2013 11:49

Well, one can be both introvert and extrovert, depending on the day tbh. I know I can be both. Started out completely introverted, discovered booze, became drunken extrovert. Got older, fucked off with society, didn't need booze to be extrovert anymore. Still have times where I just need to be AWAY from all people - just talking is a painful activity.

That last line - are you REALLY pleased for them? It seems to carry some bitterness...or maybe that's just how I read it.

First two lines are fab, btw. Chockful of meaning.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 6th Jun 2013 11:37

Hehe - faultless rhythm in this chuck. Great title, and teak! I haven't heard anyone reference teak since I was a kid!

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Greg Freeman

Thu 6th Jun 2013 06:16

Well, here's another thought, John: how does "a strident emotionalist who knows nothing" follow on from the words "working-class writer"? Or, having come from such origins myself, is it just that I'm missing something?

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John Coopey

Wed 5th Jun 2013 23:36

Hello Lynn,
Glad my Living Doll tickled your fancy.

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John Coopey

Wed 5th Jun 2013 23:35

Glad you enjoyed Living Doll, Ged. We really need more culture like this.

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John Coopey

Wed 5th Jun 2013 22:51

Don't you believe it, Ian. That Flash lady would have had it!

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John Coopey

Wed 5th Jun 2013 22:47

They say that in Paris being a waiter is almost considered a profession; that we undervalue the role in this country.
Likewise when we went to Prague the standard of mendicating was altogether superior to ours.

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John Coopey

Wed 5th Jun 2013 21:38

I've been accused of plagiarism before (their words, not mine!)
http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=33314

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John F Keane

Wed 5th Jun 2013 20:14

What is a 'working class writer'? Presumably, a strident emotionalist who knows nothing. Which is classist in itself, not to mention wrong - low income New York Jews in the 30s had academic standards to rival the Harvard Club.

Thought: why is the spoken poetry scene so intimately associated with left wing politics?

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John F Keane

Wed 5th Jun 2013 20:04

If poetry comes not as naturally as the leaves to a tree, it had better not come at all.

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Wed 5th Jun 2013 19:53

Save The Household Germ!

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Wed 5th Jun 2013 16:31

re 52 'ertz and a'that an a'that
ta fert'thupdate Isobel.xx

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Simon Marks

Wed 5th Jun 2013 14:02

My tribute to hillwalkers everywhere!

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Gus Jonsson

Wed 5th Jun 2013 13:35

Hello Isobel

You are so right... amended straightway... damn it all youare correct in your assumption regarding the bedspread...

what a girl you are!!!!

Hope to see you soon

Loveya ta bits
Gus xx

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Isobel

Wed 5th Jun 2013 13:11

Hi Gus - and we've missed you too!

I like this one - lovely internal rhyme and good use of end rhyme without being a slave to it - you feel the void good and proper. Would the fleur of Scotland be on a bedspread or a bedstead by any chance? ;)

I think you could make your penultimate line smoother by getting rid of 'all but' avoiding the repetition of all.

Sorry to be picky but I know you'll forgive me xx

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Simon Marks

Wed 5th Jun 2013 01:06

Ageing summed up beautifully for those of us who wish to avoid it.

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Simon Marks

Wed 5th Jun 2013 01:03

One for Toilet Duck, perhaps. Maybe it can find that germ.

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John F Keane

Tue 4th Jun 2013 20:47

Yes, the Art Gallery. Same time, 7 pm. I will have to confirm it with the Art Gallery, though.

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Dave Bradley

Tue 4th Jun 2013 20:24

Ingenious. Will think of this when next using the humble bleach bottle.

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Maggie Waker

Tue 4th Jun 2013 19:44

Thats good, thank you John, will it be at the Art Gallery as usual? Now I shall have to think of a poem to write. Maggie

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John F Keane

Tue 4th Jun 2013 19:05

OK, I am going to get the Gig Guide altered and the monthly meeting will be rescheduled to the 17th of June.

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Tue 4th Jun 2013 18:34

Super

love cycling great opportunity

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Tue 4th Jun 2013 17:29

:) I would never wish to be called a politicians Isobel - it is nigh on impossible to separate the good from the sleazy. Pity we don't have someone of Mandela's stature to show our lot a bit about principles...

It does seem like the LD's have been dragged down to tory levels and allow grossly unfair measures to be pushed through. Elections can't come soon enough, but whoever gets in is still going to have to tackle the power of multinationals ripping us ll off in regard to taxes.

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Greg Freeman

Tue 4th Jun 2013 15:48

Repaired now. Thanks, Julie!

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Jonnie Falafel

Tue 4th Jun 2013 15:27

That held my attention. I wanted to complete it. A nice little slice of life.

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Tue 4th Jun 2013 15:26

link broken (not a pun)

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Nigel Astell

Tue 4th Jun 2013 13:34

Moving On

Time stops
Dreams begin
Magical love
Fluttering leaves
New start
Time then
Moves on.

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Greg Freeman

Tue 4th Jun 2013 09:08

Thanks very much to Tony for his interview replies that cover a lot of ground. I was interested in his comment that "poetry operates in a series of very different worlds from which there are only limited points of crossover". I think that's true. He goes on to say that although "we should stop trying to reconcile the irreconcilable ... the different sides of the art form have lots of learn from each other". His message, as I see it, is that performance poetry may often be better at communicating than page poetry, and certainly should not feel inferior to it.

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Isobel

Tue 4th Jun 2013 07:01

Maybe you should run for office Dave? I often think the same thing myself. We need strong politicians with common sense, insight and a bit of compassion as well as a raft of policies they haven't thought through properly...

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Isobel

Tue 4th Jun 2013 06:49

Good on ya for getting it all out in the open Lynn - and what strong coffee!

Personally, I'm not against ill health benefits being reviewable because some people do get better - it's all about how the system is managed - and the ATOS crowd seem to be very callous.

Someone within my family received not a penny to live on throughout the long period of their illness due to the loopholes they found in the claimant eligibility rules. They are still now inviting him along to an interview though - to fight for his right to a benefit he isn't and hasn't ever received...

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Simon Marks

Tue 4th Jun 2013 00:14

Zeitgeist Heist is genius. How the hell did you manage to get THAT volcano name into a poem? And a Raoul Moat reference too. As someone who grew up in the very street he did his killing, can relate to that and so much in that poem.

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John Coopey

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 22:59

Glad you enjoyed, "Your First Hut Is The Cheapest", Simon. Sheds seem to be a rich vein for me (I think it's an age thing) although this was the first one on which I've inflicted one of my many parodies.

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Jeff Dawson

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 22:46

hi Richard, cheers for joining Performance! open mic night at the cadence cafe, see u at the festival!

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Mon 3rd Jun 2013 22:20

awesome!and 'thensome!'xx

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 20:35

Spot on Lynn. I keep wondering when the ATOS crowd will demand I attend some tick box interview. I will happily go if they send an ambulance, lol. Last time they asked me to attend was a date when I was having spinal surgery, so they accepted that as a viable reason to miss them. I did stress to them that their directions for me to walk a mile and a half to a bus stop, travel for an hour with one change and then walk another mile to their office was a bit unreasonable for someone normally bed ridden - they don't have a clue!

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 20:29

Hello Lynn - many thanks for your comments on "In Search Of Honest Politicians" - as Ged remarked, we can live in hope, but best not to hold our breath ... ;) Best wishes, Dave

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 20:27

Thanks for commenting on "In Search Of Honest Politicians" Ged - it is hard to use those two words in a single sentence isn't it? I've yet to visit Hope (Derbyshire), but bet it is crowded... ;) Best wishes, Dave

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 20:25

Thanks for commenting Lynn - hard to see an end to corruption unless we monitor everything politicians do...

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Lynn Dye

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 20:13

Very funny, John, gave me a chuckle.

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Lynn Dye

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 20:10

Well written, Dave, and yes, it is all too true, unfortunately.

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 16:16

Thanks Ged - it is hard to use those two words in a single sentence isn't it? I've yet to visit Hope (Derbyshire), but bet it is crowded... ;) Best wishes, Dave

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 16:12

Thanks Isobel - yeah, I'm not having a great spell so far this year, I have pain management issues from old spinal injuries that flared up. Nothing to do but drift through the chemical fog until they subside so I have some clarity of thought. But glad to be back and have something to post again. :) Best wishes, Dave

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dorinda macdowell

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 07:11

Like Maggie, I wasn't able to come along on 10 June, so Monday 17 June would be great for me!
I'll wait to hear if it's going to be that date; thanks.

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Isobel

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 06:46

Hello Dave - thanks for the comment on my Lonely Whale - where've you been? It's good to see you back on the site! x

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Isobel

Mon 3rd Jun 2013 06:44

A great topic for a poem Dave - I find the different way people interact fascinating.

I always thought that whether you were introvert or extrovert depended on self confidence - but have to come to realise that it's not the same thing - though it's hard to be a party animal when you lack confidence, it is possible to be confident in yourself but awkward socially - if that makes sense.

It just goes to show what complicated animals we are.

I like the contradictions that run through this - the fear of extroverts being tied up with being pleased for them.

All in all, very well expressed.

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