Hi Harry, thanks for the comment on symphony of the elements.
Hazel

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Well executed `symphonic` one.

It`s only a quibble but I`d have liked the `lullaby`
as a last-line finisher.

Refreshingly ambitious though...good!

Comment is about Symphony of the Elements (blog)

Original item by Hazel Connelly

Cheers, Ken, much appreciated.

Comment is about Dostoyevski's Chicken (blog)

Original item by Marksy

Dostoyevsksi's Chicken, love it, very funny.

Ken

Comment is about Dostoyevski's Chicken (blog)

Original item by Marksy

John,
All the arches of of my local church used to look like this to me at sunday mass (after a heavy saturday night at the church club)

Miraculously, now they`re all straight.

Comment is about 1069 And All That (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

My comment on 21st Century fame.

Comment is about Dostoyevski's Chicken (blog)

Original item by Marksy

Good Morning Cynthia

As ever your critique is bang 'on the money'...but try as I might I feel the tinge of purple is never the less integral.

I've performed this poem both ways to the middle and just feel that the over adjectivised version suits my ear....rather than the page...wherein you are correct.

Anyway, as always Cynthia so good to hear from you.

Hope to see you soon.
love
Gus xx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Darren

What tremendous 'rise ' I got from reading your very supportive comments...I am delighted that you liked it.

By the way my apologies for the visit to my place ....t'was time and tide that blurred the arrangement ...lets try again... phone me please

Once again many thanks.

Gus

Comment is about Dark Night (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Good Morning Cynthia

As ever your critique is bang 'on the money'...but try as I might I feel the tinge of purple is never the less integral.

I've performed this poem both ways to the middle and just feel that the over adjectivised version suits my ear....rather than the page...wherein you are correct.

Anyway, as always Cynthia so good to hear from you.

Hope to see you soon.
love
Gus xx

,,

Comment is about Dark Night (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Thank you both so much for your comments!!!! ,

I'm truly very sorry for the delay in replying due to an overload of trivia, cooking, golf, and growing older in a far less than graceful fashion.

God knows what will happen when I reach forty.

Once again to two people that I respect and hold in great regard Thank you.

Hope to see you soon.

Gusx

Comment is about Dark Night (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

our heads too,probably like many folk on WOL
are full of 'thought sparks'

at the wrong sodding time of night! haha!
our head-voices need to shut their gobs
after lights out!haha take two!xx

Comment is about Eidetic (blog)

AHHH!! but is it as good as Whalesong
we elderly courtiers in the court of
the poet princess,ask?

yea and verily!the gathered throng answer
in one poetical appreciative voice.xx

Comment is about observations (blog)

Original item by Rachel Bond

ill use 'rape' here as a term to reference every bad thing that happens as a violation...things youd rather forget.

Comment is about Eidetic (blog)

interesting alex.

i have a photgraphic memory, im not good recalling sounds and words , i can but not as vividly as the captured image. it is a blessing i can remember whole sections of text so its good for an exam, however my short term memory is a bit fucked so i only remember things once they go into long term...odd really. when i was a child and at my brightest it was great.that was before i having to remember with clarity every mistake, every rape..a curse.

Comment is about Eidetic (blog)

John,

So much for the old fear that the `Yellow Peril of millions of Chinese would over-run the world.

They now reckon that their working poulation has decreased by 3.4 million this year, and will decrease by 10million a year from 2025...And guess what? they now have an aging population and growing pension liability problem begining (just like us in the west)Although second children are more allowed now, it seems that the growing new Urban middle class ladies are-like their sisters in the west-saying no thanks boys, let`s just enjoy our growing prosperity.

To think! In China, of all places! all the same problems as the prosperous west: aging population, pension maintenance, workforce shortage (to fund the pension problem) and...could we ever have guessed it! A possible coming immigrant problem! (and the same inability as the west to recognise that immigration is required because they wished to enjoy more of the fruits of their prosperity and comparatively rather less of the fruits of their wombs. (simple arithmetic really)

You express the savagery of the abortions and the connection with cheap goods very feelingly. As you do the huge steamroller increse of the present day.

A timely reminder.

Comment is about One More Baby Means One More Tomb (blog)

Many thanks - wrote it in the wake of Thatcher's death. Reawoke the latent anger in me.
Cheers again, Simon.

Comment is about We're Northerners, us (blog)

Original item by Marksy

Yes Katy,I did enjoy the bank holiday.
How very kind of you to ask,hope you did too!x

Comment is about Katy Megan (poet profile)

Original item by Katy Megan

This is a vile, vile policy from a vile, vile government. It really beggars belief that we do business with a regime that can implement these policies.

Comment is about One More Baby Means One More Tomb (blog)

I like it - I can picture it x

Comment is about observations (blog)

Original item by Rachel Bond

I know what Francine means by quirky sad - it's that Bridgitte Jones kind of sadness - or maybe Butterflies.

You've woven a very sorry tale here Lynn - but you've forgotten to tag it! 52 Hertz please, if it's going into the comp :)

Comment is about Solitude (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

''on the fat side of my thumb''

Comment is about observations (blog)

Original item by Rachel Bond

only just come across this Marksy, I think you blogged twice on the same day, so didn't pick it up - being a tyke living in Wigan - I am a northerner by the grace of god - and love this poem - a true northern anthem mate
Ian

Comment is about We're Northerners, us (blog)

Original item by Marksy

Thanks for you comment on 'This Dog' Marksy, a fellow bass player I see.
Just read The Misfits, the section, we're northerners, put me in mind of the Black Knight in Monty Pythons Holy grail, Brilliant, well written Marksy

Comment is about Marksy (poet profile)

Original item by Marksy

Hello Ann,
You may not remember but you commented on my 'This Dog' poem nearly twelve months ago now, I did get the message and belated thank you for the welcome to WOL and your very kind comment. I did intend to respond but, y'know life just happens and althoughI intended adding more to WOL, and responding to you message I just didn't get there, anyway I found time this week and here I am, hopefully will use the WOL a little more now.
It's surprising what you can learn by reading other peoples poetry. Some of the phrasing and sentences in 'Great north diver' are fantastic, also noticed that you've got your rescue dog, well done! That short poem is really clever and your reading of it is from the heart.
There are a lot of clever writers on WOL some proper wordsmiths, I keep having to look in the dictionary to get the gist of what they're saying. the stuff I've written isn't as wordy as some other poets I've read and I have to still get my head around poems that don't rhyme but maybe I'll get there one day.

Thanks Ann
Ste Bee x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

''knitting a poem'' this phrase is so good that I'm going to take it and say I's what wrote it.

Comment is about Knitting A Poem (blog)

Original item by Fifi Fanshawe

The One-child policy
For a prosperous, powerful nation and a happy family, please practice family planning."




I like this John, its funny when I heard of the baby flushed down the toilet I thought was it a secound child but it seems it was an accident.
Anyway good stuff and I like the Art too

Comment is about One More Baby Means One More Tomb (blog)

In my opinion this is your best piece of work so far. Well done! Take care, Tony.

Comment is about Tired dreams (blog)

thanks for commenting on 'I wish I had a harley' Yvonne - my fear of speed would mean I never went near a petrol lawn mower - never mind a Harley - as John says 'born to be mild' :-)
Ian

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

Original item by Yvonne Brunton

thanks for the comment on 'I wish I had a harley' john - love the tagline 'born to be mild' wish I'd thought of that - then again, 'twat out of hell' is equally appropriate :-)
Ian

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks for your comments on 'I wish I had a harley' Tim - yes, there comes a time in a young mans life when his thoughts turn to motorbikes :-)
Ian

Comment is about Tim Ellis (poet profile)

Original item by Tim Ellis

This is a quirky kind of sad... enjoyed reading this!

Comment is about Solitude (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Harry
just posted this with the poem itself so anyone reading it can see the change you have suggested:
Harry
many thanks for pointing out the error in this Petrarchan Sonnet - I wrote it rather quickly to 'book-end' my first collection with a piece I put on here earlier ('A Step Towards Winter')Despite checking the manuscript a number of times this wasn't spotted, so you've saved my bacon :-)
I've amended the verse pattern if you want to have another look at it - I value your opinion and am so pleased you spotted this - so thanks once again
Ian

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Harry
many thanks for pointing out the error in this Petrarchan Sonnet - I wrote it rather quickly to 'book-end' my first collection with a piece I put on here earlier ('A Step Towards Winter')Despite checking the manuscript a number of times this wasn't spotted, so you've saved my bacon :-)
I've amended the verse pattern if you want to have another look at it - I value your opinion and am so pleased you spotted this - so thanks once again
Ian

Comment is about A Step Towards Summer (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

For you - punctuation; for me - proof reading.
I find it really irksome to find AFTER posting something that I have made an error in a word, usually due to the proximity of letters on the PC keyboard (well, that's my excuse!). Happily, not all is lost and in the latest example, it actually works just as well. In my comment on JC's poem about Gloucester Cathedral, I typed "ensuring" when I had intended "enduring". But it shows how these things can slip by, doesn't it?

Comment is about Hazel Connelly (poet profile)

Original item by Hazel Connelly

Wonderful poetry and sentiment, Mike, brought tears to my eyes. Good audio, as always xx

Comment is about Leaving (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Great interview Greg. I can ses how easy it must be with so many poems online and I think Ira is right to sympathize with offenders as well as finding out others. "Beauty is truth, truth beauty" If 20% of drugs are fake, what % of poems are?

Comment is about The Write Out Loud interview: Ira Lightman (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Very much so, Frances. Our news item about it drew in a lot of interest on our Write Out Loud Community Facebook page. Andy Jackson tells me that submissions have been coming, er... thick and fast.

Comment is about Wanted: short poems about ads for Red Squirrel anthology (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

That's a good question, Anthony. I'm afraid I don't know the answer. But this link may help you find out http://www.poetrylibrary.org.uk/publishers/

Comment is about Rubbing Salt in it: poets mourn publisher's pullout (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Follow
pine
float
then
wait.

The
sound
of
your
voice.

Only
heard
when
poetry
written.

Comment is about Of Katy and Narcissus (52 hertz) (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

Thos Cathederals are prayers in stone.

(I like the cleaness of your rhyming here John.)

Comment is about "As Sure As God's In Gloucester..." (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

A poem about Domestos? This is serious, right?

Comment is about Wanted: short poems about ads for Red Squirrel anthology (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

I like your Love poem very emotive, welcome)

Comment is about Edie Hope (poet profile)

Original item by Edie Hope

I go with Isobels views on this poem.x

Comment is about 52 Hertz (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Dave
The first time I saw this the title was missing.
Now the linking the whale to a (univeral?) human lack makes it more powerful.

I was struck by the way lines fifteen to twenty nine would make a very powerful personal poem on their own.

Comment is about 52 Hertz (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Ian,
Nice sentiment and use of a sonnet form.

Maybe line three could end with something like `passed` though I can see that you might then have had to change the `past` ending line six.

(these things always get me caught up in them):)

Comment is about A Step Towards Summer (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Hi Tommy I didn't really understand it, so I deleted it.

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

You've whetted my appetite to go there, John. Cathedrals can be such intriguing and atmospheric places to hang out in. And when I get there I'll ask God why Gloucester cheese has got 'Double' in front of it.

Comment is about "As Sure As God's In Gloucester..." (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Fascinating indeed. Thanks Greg. The students at Northumbria have got themselves an interesting lecturer.

Comment is about The Write Out Loud interview: Ira Lightman (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Such a shame. Out of curiosity, how many publishers accept poetry submissions?

Comment is about Rubbing Salt in it: poets mourn publisher's pullout (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Great interview Greg - insightful responses too. Personally I think Ira has performed a great service for poetry and those that love to read it. I also thought his initial response was generous rather than mean spirited, seeking and hoping for error rather than deceit.

I find it hard to understand why anybody would be critical of the position he has taken; uncovering the truth is surely the priority?

If the truth is not the priority; where does that leave poetry?

Best of

Chris

Comment is about The Write Out Loud interview: Ira Lightman (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman