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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 18th May 2013 23:54

great stuff. i love the idea of last night's ghosts scurrying home and the lazy cat. Then comes the abrupt disturbance of the peace by the LGV - a great contrast and the whole poem woven seamlessly together by the cat's comment - delicious!
( I half expected the response to the question to be - 'fertilised')

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 18th May 2013 23:44

Nice one Dorinda. I love the fun that can be had with poorly worded or punctuated signs. I regularly see one that states Free range chickens. I'm not sure what a range chicken looks like, but if they are free I'll have one!

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 18th May 2013 23:40

I really like this Isobel, especially after all the information about 52 Hertz. xx

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Paul Sands

Sat 18th May 2013 19:39

Thank you. It was wake up, scribble, move, scribble this morning

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Sat 18th May 2013 17:51

very much enjoyed,with one exception-
the last stanza needed a tad more work IOHO.xx

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Sat 18th May 2013 17:46

nothing scrambled
about this very,very,good poem.xx

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Sat 18th May 2013 17:43

oh! good one Dorinda.xx

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Julian (Admin)

Sat 18th May 2013 17:02

Thanks Greg, a really good little film, well produced; and certainly recognisable by many of our members and event organisers.

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Ian Whiteley

Sat 18th May 2013 17:00

Harry
it's all relative - to soft southerners it's cold - to hardy yorkshiremen it's 'cracking't pavements' :-)

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Jon

Sat 18th May 2013 16:40

I think every street at some point has had such a woman counted amongst their number...kinda makes me feel angry and sad for her at the same time...
When we were kids,if our ball went into Miss ashurst's garden,it was always a matter of life and death to be brave enough to try to get it back.
The first stanza is very telling and very strong for me,but it's all excellent Ian.
Nice one.

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Jon

Sat 18th May 2013 16:35

Yes...nice,twisted little poem Ian...'they will open their doors wide,on their caravan of collected souls...and I will step inside'

Spooky indeed!

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 18th May 2013 16:32


I`m glad you spoke about stories Ian, That`s the way this strikes me - halfway between a poem and a story.

(Mind, you`ve got to give the kids in it lean and eerily white faces)

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 18th May 2013 16:26


John,
Next time I`m in the neighborhood it`s a must.

(but why is it always so bloody cold up there?)

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 18th May 2013 16:21


Marcus,
I like the way your last lines (aptly) finish off your poems.


Keep `em comin`

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Ian Whiteley

Sat 18th May 2013 14:32

I have no trouble with the concept that the devil is something very real - you only have to watch the news to realise that this is so, with child killers an almost daily occurrence :-(

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Rachel Bond

Sat 18th May 2013 14:17

profound statement something i struggle with all the time.

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Jonnie Falafel

Sat 18th May 2013 13:16

PS. IMHO You should take out 'that' at the end of the last line or beginning of second....

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Jonnie Falafel

Sat 18th May 2013 13:13

That's interesting. I wonder why the devil would be 'something' rather than 'someone'. I suppose it depends on the concept of God too. The fact that evil exists is a problem for the monotheistc religions, since they insist God is good and all powerful. It follows from this that god has a responsibility for evil. For me one of the major character flaws of Jesus (and there are many) was his conviction that the devil and hell were real. We'll those three lines made me go on a bit!

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Ian Whiteley

Sat 18th May 2013 13:11

Filey - the holiday of my youth :-)
used to stay in a a carvan park and be on the beach by 8 am playing cricket and football. It was a cheap holiday for my parents as we were only 60 miles or so away in Wakefield.
Also stayed at Flamborough head in a caravan - where it always seemed to be foggy and the lighthouse boomed out a fog warning every minute which kept you awake all night.
You've captured the essence of Filey very well in your Poem John - and it's made me nostalgic to vist - may have to do the long trek across t'Pennines this summer and check it out :-)

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Julian (Admin)

Sat 18th May 2013 09:19

Thank you all for the supportive comments. Uschi and Kate, you are not registered on the site, which is fine, but means I don't have your email addresses to keep in touch over using the wiki. Can you either register - you will need to to experiment with the wiki - or contact me via info@writeoutloud.net? Thanks, danke schon, merci.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 17th May 2013 22:38


Chris,
Congratulations on your new venue to you and Glenys and Natalie.

And what an enjoyable night to start it all off with.

Well done!

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Fri 17th May 2013 21:39

... except that this isn't me, I'm afraid!
If you want to see what I really look like, take a peep here: http://martinvosperwrites.wordpress.com/about/

(but I can see the similarity!)

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Pete Slater

Fri 17th May 2013 19:22

The child within is too easily lost. We forget how to simply accept and tend to over analyse our lives.
Listen to a distant sound of thunder
and imagine ......
I love my grandchildren.
Josh, the little boy in the pic shouted to me, "Look grandad I'm catching the rain!"
What could I say? ... NOTHING !! ....So I stepped outside, into his world and tried to catch the rain.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Pete the Bus Driving Poet.

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Shirley Smothers

Fri 17th May 2013 17:41

Hello again Richard. My husband was the stay at home parent for two years. So he has seen the pro and con of at home parenting. Your poem "Mother's Autumn" speaks well of this.

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Richard

Fri 17th May 2013 17:23

Thank you Shirley so pleased you liked it, and do you know its about a year old and so often people miss its very obvious meaning, you understood it perfectly.
No I cant paint for toffee so I didn't do the artwork but it is a great pic.
As a father who home-educated his son and was the house wife if you like, I have maybe a better understanding of motherhood than many men xx thanks

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Shirley Smothers

Fri 17th May 2013 17:15

Beautiful! Just beautiful. I think as adults we all fear, the growing up of our children, or crave to return to when our children were younger.
Beautiful artwork. Did you do this?
Very moving poem.

Shirley

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Richard

Fri 17th May 2013 15:56

I liked this a lot )

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Martin Peacock

Fri 17th May 2013 15:31

Cheers for the comments on The Writing Class, MC; allusions to Betjeman muchly appreciated too - I'm beginning to think that structured, formal verse is most definitely frowned on by today's poetic community (someone recently commented that no rhymed poetry stands a chance of winning comps or being published) so comparison with someone of his stature stands as no small compliment.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 17th May 2013 15:05

In the tradition of R.L. Stevenson - a charming
piece of imagery.

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Fri 17th May 2013 14:52

with you on this one Winston.x

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 17th May 2013 14:40

A painful and consistently accurate portrait ofwhat it is like to endure the loss of a parent(or anyone as close) to that terrible thief of identity and existence.
I know and empathise!

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 17th May 2013 14:35

I was reminded in passing of "What is this life, so full of care..."
Enjoyed this as a gentle reminder to keep the
innocence of childhood fresh.
..................
Let the child within you live
Even while you earn a living
And you'll not lose the gift to give
Or the gift of others giving!

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Isobel

Fri 17th May 2013 13:16

LOL - thank you Richard - I really enjoyed myself last night.

Performance poetry is all about hip action and don't let anyone tell you otherwise ;)

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Rachel Bond

Thu 16th May 2013 22:22

fantastic. this is poetry to me, in seagreen with anenomes :)

i also love the sea., but it totally scares me..i can get overwhelmed ina fear of the sea...not the splashy waves and ripplets of the shore but the sheer size and tumultous prescence of its muscley wet arms travelled in only a few miles.. writhing around in the gales of winds capable of smashing whole towns out and the speed of a tsunami wave. its like a great mercurial beast..it scares me witless. i dont even want to think about what lurks underneath. deep in the deepest deep where explorers know more of space than of its creatures ut i love its peace. its noise is massive but it sounds in the ear and brain like white noise and people are speechless by its lull....i love everything of being near the sea and tales of sailors and mermaids..truley,this one is beautiful xx

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Karli

Thu 16th May 2013 22:17

glad to see something new from you...
like it x

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Thu 16th May 2013 19:04

I really like this

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Ian Whiteley

Thu 16th May 2013 18:51

Thanks Tina :-)

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Tina Ford

Thu 16th May 2013 18:33

So touching x

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Tina Ford

Thu 16th May 2013 18:30

So true Ian, Thank you for your comment :) x

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 16th May 2013 17:26

Richard - thanks for the comment you left on "Dambuster". I look forward to reading your "Lancaster" poem in due course.

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Richard

Thu 16th May 2013 17:13

It inspired me also I have always loved aviation which helps, but I titled a poem after watching the news today called Lancaster,
which I will write down the line )

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Jonnie Falafel

Thu 16th May 2013 16:43

I love the nautical imagery. I love the surprise of the language. Very arresting. What are your influences?

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 16th May 2013 13:13

Thank you for your time and comment, Richard. I love the sea too and the way it can mother me similarly.

Take care.

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Richard

Thu 16th May 2013 13:06

Love this, your lines brake and ebb and it invokes so much, on a personal level for me.
My soul is bound to the sea, I am never more calm then when close to it, never happier.

I found her hair tangling around
my ankles; a translucent green

seaweed to me )





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Ian Whiteley

Thu 16th May 2013 10:33

Very moving Tina - I also lost my mum to Alzheimers and other age related illness a couple of years ago - and also wrote a poem called 'forget me not' which is somewhere down the list on my profile/blog page.
It is something that destroys you as a child, because you 'lose' the one you love before you actuaslly lose them - if that makes sense?
Ian

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Lynn Dye

Wed 15th May 2013 22:37

Hi Richard, great poem, I enjoyed this.

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Lynn Dye

Wed 15th May 2013 22:26

Hi Isobel, thank you for your kind comments on perspective. I haven't written much lately, so greatly appreciated. I like your 52 Hertz idea, I shall have to get thinking! xx

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winston plowes

Wed 15th May 2013 22:24

Posted as part of Mental Health Blog Day - http://www.yourmindyourbody.org/mental-health-month-blog-day/

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Isobel

Wed 15th May 2013 21:32

Scary stuff. It seems unimaginable that a history, a homeland, a nation can just disappear like that - possibly more easy to accept when it's on this scale - but imagine when it's Holland...

I like the reference to the tracing of circles - it brings to mind the grid lines on a map. if I was better at geography I'd know what those circles are called but the word escapes me.

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Isobel

Wed 15th May 2013 19:07

Oh dear - you sound that bad do you? Well, at least I can vouch for your voice being pleasantly low Ian, even if it is tuneless!

David, Ian - everyone - I'm really looking forward to hearing your poems.

In fact I've changed my mind about offering a prize. I just received something from Nick (who organised the last one) in the post and it was a lovely surprise - made a change from bills and charity bags at any rate. So, there will be something little for first prize - so long as you trust me with your address :)

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