Uschi Wheeler
Wed 15th May 2013 15:36
"Mad Experiment" sounds like a fantastic concept!
My first language is German but I write poetry in English. At school I was fascinated how well Shakespeare translated, to the point of suspecting an underlying conspiracy.
I have six publications to show for and had an article about rhyme published in the October issue of WOL.
If I can help, I'm up for it!
Uschi Wheeler
Comment is about Mad experiment on Write Out Loud – translating poems online! (article)
Original item by Julian Jordon
First - thanks for your kind comment on my last post.
"We laugh...we jest...
To forestall the final rest!"
Second: love your line "I'm glummer than a raindrop falling on a hearse" (above) in a very funny poem. Priceless!
Comment is about George Stanworth (poet profile)
Original item by George Stanworth
Hi Gemma I like this very much, its harsh but so poetic and invokes a perfect sense of the place, nice )
Comment is about Bury Market (blog)
Original item by Gemma Lees
Hot kitten
Sexual appetite
lover's dream
uncertain future
means that
it will
broken again
and again
and again.
Comment is about Morning Shower (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Slight Drawback
Heaton Arts
lady designer
foreign translation
Julian explains
blue trousers
golfer gear
political split
why not!
french poem
ohh lala
doctor ambushed
badly beaten
varied selection
fine poetry
only one
slight drawback
no time
collage poem.
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Yvonne,
That bloody Coopey feller again!...He gets all of them!...It`s the youth, isn`t it...and the guitar?...that sound you can hear is my teeth grinding...all four of them.
Comment is about A poet at prayer (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Hi Ann I really enjoyed Breathing, for me the sound of the words almost made me lose sight of the meaning, if that makes sense wonderful )
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Hey John kind words as ever, the picture is the profile one) its a beautiful painting, of for me a beautiful place
Comment is about Richard Alfred (poet profile)
Original item by Richard Alfred
Thought your Blackpool poem had gone mate,was looking for it then found it here.'Sweet smell from pink hair to eat.Clowns of glass,elephants and rock.' Love it,but didnt it have a posting of its own with the brill pic?
I could taste the candyfloss,feel its sticky sweetness as I read this.'Charm,romance,beauty!nostalgia'
Comment is about Richard Alfred (poet profile)
Original item by Richard Alfred
Great poem Richard,sad/heartbreaking but full of depth and experience.
Comment is about Cruel Impossible Love (blog)
Original item by Richard Alfred
thunder-inward
cosmos needle points
of angry miracles
like this very much
Comment is about Eye (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
What a very clever form this takes Tommy, really, really innovative, the sort of thing you wish you'd done yourself. Well done! Left frustratingly hanging. Graham
Comment is about 00:01 (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
I like this very much Lynn I have a real love for green fields and golden meadows and I know it twists at the end but it still invokes beautiful imagery on a personal level for me :)
Comment is about perspective (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thanks for your kind comments on 'eyrie avenue' jonnie - glad you liked it - i hope it stayed just on this side of eerie - and the pay-off is the thought of what/who else is behind those other twitching curtains.
You know - I'd never even thought about the dual connotation of 'horny' and now I do I want to change it :-)
Cheers
Ian
Comment is about Jonnie Falafel (poet profile)
Original item by Jonnie Falafel
I'd be well up for doing something too. They are fracking here in West Sussex...
Comment is about Whole lot of shaking going on: poets join fight against fracking (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
thanks for commenting on 'eyrie avenue' Yvonne - it's an older poem of mine and the characters are actual people - glad you liked it
Ian
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
Thank you for the encouraging words Jonnie
Comment is about Paul Sands (poet profile)
Original item by Paul Sands
Do watch the video! There's a bit of everything at Sunday Xpress, it seems. It's not just poetry, it's true; but listening to the stories unfold in this very enjoyable piece of film, this venue in Brum does seem to have many typical characteristics - and characters - that Write Out Louders will recognise. And, as Brendan says, it keeps him out of the bookies.
Comment is about Poetry and all that jazz: Birmingham's Sunday Xpress at Adam & Eve (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
IKEA is brilliant. Haven't laughed so much for a long time. Very funny.
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
Love the satire. These are my kind of poems. Superb.
Comment is about Your First Hut Is The Cheapest (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I like the dark humour. Very witty.
Comment is about THE MAGICAL MEDICAL MERRY-GO-ROUND (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Very original. Enjoyed this. Love your style.
Comment is about 00:01 (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Thanks for commenting on my old coat Lynn - yes it's one that I think would appeal to women more than men - I do believe that we feel things differently at times.
Any chance of a poem from you on the 52 Hertz theme? x
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thanks Richard & Isobel
it was written as an homage to Poe, so I'm so so glad that Richard picked up on that :-)
I write short stories Isobel, usually Magic Realism, Horror or fantasy - and this was adapted from one of those.
I love the idea that the clowns claim back their murderers by taking them into the caravan and painting them up to become one of them. A twisted revenge - who do you feel sorry for - the kids or the clowns????
mwuhaaahaaahaaahaaah!
Comment is about That Which Autumn Leaves (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
I'm with Richard on clowns - I've always seen them as potentially sad subjects - covering their sadness with the paint and farce - not really being heard or seen.
This poem makes for a macabre nightmare story though - the stuff you might see in a film. I suppose as soon as you don any disguise there is the potential for children not to see you as you are - human beings.
Interesting poem - where do you get your ideas from? Not from experience, let's hope ;)
Comment is about That Which Autumn Leaves (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
This just brought a great big smile to my face :)
Please don't consider it a tit for tat comment - though I'm grateful for yours on my coat poem. I just love the humour in this - the way your lofty, dreamy language leads to that punch line. I think it's very skilfully done - and a sad but funny reflection on reality :)
Comment is about perspective (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Very good this, it for sure appeals to me, its funny, on a personal level I don't find clowns fearful at all I find them sad and wonderful but so many people think they are a thing of nightmares. This reads like something Poe might of wrote.....love it
Comment is about That Which Autumn Leaves (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Thank you Francine, gratifying to know :-)
Comment is about perspective (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Hi Isobel, I really love this poem. It works so well on different levels, and definitely one I easily associate with. xx
Comment is about A day in the life of... an old coat (blog)
Original item by Isobel
The samples were speriamo good I had a scoot through the list. Wonderful stuff. Midnight Bird struck a chord. One thing i notice where i live now is the absence of light pollution. You can see the bands of the Milky Way when there are no clouds. I also thought of the way humans change the ecology of natural habitats. The foxes in British towns and the bears in Canada.
Loved Remembrance to. Very poignant.
Comment is about Paul Sands (poet profile)
Original item by Paul Sands
Hut's the way (uh-huh uh-huh) I like it (uh-huh uh-huh)...
Comment is about Your First Hut Is The Cheapest (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Cheers for the comments re: The Writing Class me hearty. I'm not much of an Abba fan either (can't you just tell there's a bad joke about Scandiwegian vegetables dying to come forward right about now?)
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
Cheers for the comments Johnnie. Me too: I love the discipline of tight rhythm and rhyme - it makes me think about my native language in an expansive way. Although I write in free verse too I believe that one shouldn't think of oneself as a poet until structured poetry has been...well, if not mastered then at least taken to task. Is that a contradictory principle for a revolutionary socialist to hold? I can picture many poets thinking me a reactionary fuddy duddy for holding that opinion, but I'd argue that I simply love my craft, this artistic enterprise called poetry too much to be slipshod, to settle for 'just' or 'always' writing free.
Comment is about Jonnie Falafel (poet profile)
Original item by Jonnie Falafel
I could visualise this all the way through!
Comment is about perspective (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
After shock would work well too. I tried to explain that expression earlier. After pain resonates more for me because it relates to childbirth - it's about pain rather than shock - after pains are like contractions - very very painful and they strike right at the core of you.
In a way, poems are like babies, you give birth to them and then you outgrow them - or maybe they outgrow you.
Thanks for reading - I appreciate it.
Comment is about A day in the life of... an old coat (blog)
Original item by Isobel
LOL - everything you've said would be supported by very many people on WOL. You should check out the discussion thread on 'sentimentality', which wandered down that very same route.
There are the right wing extremists who believe that free verse isn't poetry, there are the left wing extremists who believe that ancient rules strangle the essence of poetry and there are the liberals, who believe that knowledge of rules is preferable, even if they aren't adhered to...
Those classifications are just me poking fun of course. There are probably plenty more you could think up. I've written a few poems in strictly metred format. I enjoyed them as an exercise but like to try my hand at free verse now. It's incredibly hard for me to do free verse though. My musical ear want it to flow - and it's a lot harder to write flowing poetry without rhyme - which leads me to abandoning lots of poems.
Rhyming poetry doesn't seem to win many poetry comps though, if you take a look around at what is flavour of the day... Not that that bothers me cos I don't enter them - it's just an indication of where contemporary poetry is going.
Best get off before I end up writing an essay :)
Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)
Original item by Richie Muster
Hmm. An evocative and thought-provoking poem Isobel. Poems do have the unsettling habit of reminding us of our former selves don't they? Might it be better ended by changing 'after pain' to 'aftershock'?
Comment is about A day in the life of... an old coat (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Well thanky kindly for your comment on 'The Writing Class', Isobel. Oddly enough it didn't take as long to write as it did to polish up. Shaving off the rough burrs and embellishing it took much longer! I lament the fact that not much rhymed poetry gets written these day: I get the impression that, for many free verse is the default option, to the detriment of good poetic style and construction. I'd be interested in your opinion on this: all I see around me is prose poetry (of which I'm not averse - I write quite a bit myself) which ought to be but one weapon in a poet's arsenal, not the be all and end all. Perhaps I'm an anachronism, but I believe that a budding poet oughtn't to write free until they've mastered structure. Is that contentious do you think?
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Brilliant news Frances
Comment is about Write Out Loud's reviews editor wins poetry award (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Great to see so many familiar names of Wolers in here :-) Well done all!
Comment is about Write Out Loud poets line up with famous names in Heart Shoots charity anthology (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks Alex/Francine - the proof of the pudding is in the eating. Let's see whether it takes off as a theme. I hope it does as I'd like to see what people make of it. There's sometimes no accounting for what people want to write about though. x
Comment is about 52 Hertz (blog)
Original item by Isobel
I like this Harry - it's a well observed piece. It's funny how such moments can live with you for a lifetime - you capture it well.
Comment is about SIN AGAINST THE SPIRIT? (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
One more (revised) re-post from my accidently wiped profile.
Comment is about SIN AGAINST THE SPIRIT? (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Mon 13th May 2013 19:49
dear Yvonne
That's amazingly generous of you. I'll study yours hard and see what comes out. Must study use of reflexive.
I'm hoping that trying to write in French will help the compression process leaving me with "impressions" I believe Sam Beckett wrote in French for this reason - amongst others.
Meanwhile I'm having an additional bathroom installed next week and hope poets will drop in - all WOLs welcome.
Graham
Comment is about TRANSPOECY (blog)
Original item by Graham Chadwick
Dream on! I would have volunteered for the job but J. C.'s already offered me the position of chief groupie. Oh, decisions, decisions!
However I still enjoy reading your poems and this has lots of lovely images.
XX
Comment is about A poet at prayer (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
In the firebird how's about:-
Au tombé du jour au bord du Salagou
J’ai vu l’oiseau du feu.
Dans les plissements entre les ruffes rougeâtres
Il se nourrit des grains de météore.
Tout à coup il s’est envolé,
Sa voix, "Clic, clic, clic!"
Un compteur Geiger.
Sur les collines le vent ebbouriffe
les feuilles d'olivier
Les transformant aux ailes des anges.
dans le bleu une plume argentée
cherche à devenir nuage.
mais elle se réduit, se réduit, se réduit à néant,
mais, peut-être, une intimation d'un orage,
la crise terminale de la canicule/
Le bruit blanc des cigales s'arrete, marque une pause,
et recommence.
Je n'entends que leur silence.
Des gouses d'acanthe s'explosent et jettent
leurs balles, PING, sur le toit du fer
de notre terrasse
Des cloches de chèvre tintent, quelque part, quelque part?
Parmi les arbres crie une tronçonneuse, crie, et s'arrête.
Et en haut, le bourdonnement parasseux d'un avion.
French makes frequent use of the reflexive form of the verb when there is no direct object.
It was easier to cut, paste then alter the originals rather than discuss individual words - but these are only suggestions anyway.
I enjoyed both poems graham and I envy you living in Grance!
Comment is about TRANSPOECY (blog)
Original item by Graham Chadwick
Hi Yvonne - I enjoyed your "like for like"
response on my last post (oops...sounds like I'm tempting providence...musically speaking!!)
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
Quality stuff, this, John - unlike your first shed.
Ps can I have your old shed?
Comment is about Your First Hut Is The Cheapest (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Ian Whiteley
Wed 15th May 2013 18:59
I will enter something official for this shortly Isobel - but here's a haiku for a bit of fun:
Fifty Two Hurts
I sang you that song
every week for a year
and still I’m alone…..
those who have heard my sound samples will understand :-)
Comment is about 52 Hertz (blog)
Original item by Isobel