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Ann Foxglove

Sun 16th Oct 2011 12:21

Thanks both - yes Win, they were all done - on Thursday! You may be right about the end but I'm still hanging onto those images for now. (But he's coming down for christmas so that's OK!)

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Sun 16th Oct 2011 12:20

Hi Nick, Welcome to WOL. Hope you continue to post things on here. Winston

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Lynn Dye

Sun 16th Oct 2011 12:20

Lol! Thanks for your comments, S&T, much appreciated. This was inspired by walking Benji at 6.20 in the morning before going to work! Thanks again, Lynn xxxx

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Sun 16th Oct 2011 12:16

Hi again zethembiso, thanks for adding a picture and welcome aboard. Winston

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Sun 16th Oct 2011 12:11

Hi Emma, welcome to WOL. Winston

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Sun 16th Oct 2011 12:08

Hi Rose, Welcome to Write Out Loud. Winston

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winston plowes

Sun 16th Oct 2011 11:57

Hi Ann

loved all these reflective actions. Can see them all being done. great poem

might be tempted to make a blunter end and get rid of the two longer lines at the end. just an idea. like this -


Fold back the futon
shake the duvet
wash the sheets.


put away the sugar
till next time.

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Isobel

Sun 16th Oct 2011 11:13

Lol - I can imagine the reading groups you lot must belong to!

I've read this more than once and it always makes me laugh. What is it about Tunbridge Wells? I bet they're just as rampant as any other town - probably worse cos it's all pent up.

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Isobel

Sun 16th Oct 2011 11:00

Nice rhyme and pace - and good to see some positives in getting old... Some old people tend to think their age gives them an excuse to say exactly what they like without wrapping anything up. I'll probably be one of them :)

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Greg Freeman

Sun 16th Oct 2011 09:27

Spare and very effective, Ann.

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Francine

Sun 16th Oct 2011 03:10

I really like the way you express the thoughts and feelings in this, Thom.
It's always reflective. I especially like the title and these lines:

'All this assumption of absolutes, burned bridges
there being no way to return to stir this into a mess'

'All this forward thinking, predictive dreaming
pushing eyes and minds to see something not yet shown'

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Lynn Dye

Sun 16th Oct 2011 00:12

Hee hee, wicked, John.

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Sat 15th Oct 2011 23:31

marvellous !!

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Sat 15th Oct 2011 23:22

aha!
did,nt let my ignorance show
this time.(having nearly missed 'love games)

this reminds me of so many
woodland Autumn walks we have had,
in which we always ended up
making piles with dead leaves-
lying down on them and......(better not)

you will have the sweats hee hee.

especially loved the last two lines

night night lovely Lady
S&T.xxxxxx

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Sat 15th Oct 2011 23:21

I thought you'd be more of the "H&E" generation ;) .......sorry

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 15th Oct 2011 17:55

Westminster seems a better bet
If company you seek to get!
Your lines brought a mix of wry sympathy and
a knowing twinkle to these old London eyes.
M.C.

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Bob Hill

Sat 15th Oct 2011 15:46

thanks Winston

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Sat 15th Oct 2011 15:32



most excellent...nuff said !

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steve mellor

Sat 15th Oct 2011 14:44

Hi Dave
I love poems that I can understand; are witty; and very clever. For me, this does it all.

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Jon

Sat 15th Oct 2011 13:36

To anyone considering attending this group,I'd say just give it a go.I attend every month and it's a good group to join in with for making you think more deeply about the construction of your poems. Of course,Elaine is also a great host also!

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Sat 15th Oct 2011 12:50

Hi Jack, Welcome to WOL. Winston

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Sat 15th Oct 2011 12:50

Hi there Elaine, Would highly recommend anyone going to this group. A very welcoming and creative bunch. No experience required.

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Sat 15th Oct 2011 12:43

Hi there Noetic-fret!, welcome to WOL. Winston

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Sat 15th Oct 2011 12:38

Hi The content and your delivery leave me speechless with admiration (and envy!!) A great performance!

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Sat 15th Oct 2011 12:06

Great evening, Gemma THEY CAME!! Bury is a reservoir of talent etc. (can't see same thing ever happening in Bolton!)
Maybe WOL could try the tipee approach elsewhere!!

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Mab Jones

Sat 15th Oct 2011 11:09

The event in the National Botanic Garden was organised by amazing musician CHERYL BEER by the way!! Check out the Garden website for details of her album launch, *highly recommended*!!! http://www.gardenofwales.org.uk/?page_id=12524

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Mab Jones

Sat 15th Oct 2011 11:09

Also, this is coming up in Cardiff, featuring Luke Wright!! http://www.facebook.com/events/264262010278567/

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Sat 15th Oct 2011 07:45

Hi Winston, thanks for comment, unusually for me I haven't "borrowed" from anywhere else for this poem. Cheers Neil

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Elaine Booth

Sat 15th Oct 2011 02:48

You are a magic-maker, amazing wordsmith, sha-woman - what you do with words just blows me away. It is so truly your voice too, utterly unique and compelling. Keep 'em coming, your poems are such a pleasure to read, really inspiring. XX

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Elaine Booth

Sat 15th Oct 2011 02:43

Great to see this poem posted Dave. I loved the colours as theme, tying it all together. Really enjoyed this last night and it was good to sit and listen to a longer poem also. XX

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Elaine Booth

Sat 15th Oct 2011 02:35

Brilliant to see this up here. Thanks - a great laugh out loud poem for a miserable rainy day or just any time. Loved this at the Tudor last night. You made a big contribution to making a good night out even better. Took "Blue Nun" into work today to get us all singing and in the mood for the weekend! Cheers, Dave. X

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 14th Oct 2011 23:33

"gone"

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 14th Oct 2011 21:16

Incisive and effective - like the activity described!

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 14th Oct 2011 20:48

Having read your lines, it was even better to
listen to you reading them. Super. Like "Stinker" Murdoch (remember him?) on acid!

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 14th Oct 2011 20:20

There's a top studio guy called Pete Dymond in
Bristol BS15 1UA who puts stuff on disc and did this for yours truly after I sent him a
tape of my home-made version. I thought he did
a pretty good job of capturing the original early "Cash" sound.

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Ray Miller

Fri 14th Oct 2011 20:12

Good poem, Dave, well constructed.I liked the 2nd verse in particular.

Black the oil. Guzzled freely on freeways,

Here, it's found around.

That 2nd line seems a bit odd to me.

Where gold, precious gold, that made this wealthy land

Should be "land wealthy" surely?



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Philipos

Fri 14th Oct 2011 20:08

Dear Mr Coopey, I hope the nag was droopy and didn't hurt your eye. Cos when I read your naughty words I laughed until I cried.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 14th Oct 2011 20:01

I knew I must finish or I'd be bereft
Before I made my excuses and left.
Keep 'em coming. This is good for the health.
M.C.

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John Coopey

Fri 14th Oct 2011 19:55

Wossa last yellow word, Ann?

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Ray Miller

Fri 14th Oct 2011 19:52

You're a wicked man, John Coopey, a wicked, wicked man. Fiona Millicent is brilliant!

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John Coopey

Fri 14th Oct 2011 19:51

Top Bombing!
Even better than the poem with the music.
Is it you playing all the instruments, a group of you or some clever computerised wizardry? Either way it's brilliant.
I posted a poor attempt at a song earlier this year, "Nights in Prestatyn". Not a patch on this though!

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steve mellor

Fri 14th Oct 2011 19:35

Hi Win
Amen
All seems to be well at my end
Merci

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Fri 14th Oct 2011 18:48

ayup Lynn!
I would love to know
how this little belter
got past my usual scrutinizing?

'if only all this were for me'
blimey! how much do you want?

lovely poem
top marks.

Patricia and Stef.xx

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Lynn Dye

Fri 14th Oct 2011 18:26

I just love this witty poem of bird observation, Dave, well written. xx

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Francine

Fri 14th Oct 2011 18:00

Mais bien sûr : )

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Isobel

Fri 14th Oct 2011 17:12

And great minds think alike..... :-))

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Isobel

Fri 14th Oct 2011 17:08

Sounds like you had a wonderful holiday Dave - and a very inspiring one! A nice idea to use colour to represent your thoughts and experiences.

I like the way you have ended it with nature triumphing over materialism - you can just picture those fish. x

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Francine

Fri 14th Oct 2011 17:08

I have to agree with all that has already been said...
Sounds like you had quite an inspiring adventure! Lovely photo too!

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 14th Oct 2011 16:53

Enjoyed this Dave! particularly the first three parts.

Nice the way you`ve used the first three colours -the white, the brown, and the green - as the possessors, the replacers, and the prize
in a calm, unracist, manner, and then used the green as a snaring kelp.

Also the way you`ve used the threats to species and the oil to warn against doing the deeds of the previous owners.

And all within a freshly observed, colourful holiday poem!
good work!


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Dave Carr

Fri 14th Oct 2011 16:16

Great poem Dave - and a good idea to use the colour theme (should it be color?)
Some wonderful descriptions and analogies.
I once got stopped by the police for speeding past a church in Utah. Doesn't get more serious.
Dave

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