I also enjoyed reading this, Stella, and can relate to it on many levels.
You do convey the feeling so well!

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Hello once again, YOU!

Thank you for reading and commenting on 'Intrusive' - this is the one I was telling you about - I wrote it six months ago, and I kept going back to it, but only tweaked it ever so slightly - it just never sat well with me until the other day reading it again - feeling that it was complete AND enough time had passed...

xxx

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Hey, I know this feeling, Stella! (Says she, sitting on settee with a laptop, while housework awaits...) Well expressed. xx

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Thank you Andy :) Know what you mean, shops seem to get earlier and earlier each year... frightening!

Thanks Philipos :) My mum was a dressmaker, and I think it was the year she left a dress from Santa that I realised!

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Andy,

Thank you once again for reading and commenting on my work!
I always find it so fascinating how people interpret things...

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Original item by Andy N

This is inspiring. I myself have anger issues. Maybe I should use this prayer and often.

Shirley

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Original item by M.C. Newberry

Thanks for commenting on "A Silly Goblin Poem".
My poetry has never been compared to anyone famous.
LOL!
Nice illustration. Is it yours?

Thanks
Shirley

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Hi Lynn, 'Exodus' pleased you enjoyed that one a fav, of mine as well.

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I agree with Isobel. Washing dusters? Like darning socks. Get them in the bin.
Incidentally, if Isobel has more old pairs of knickers than she needs for dusters I'd be happy to take them off her.

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Yes - you express yourself in a thoughtful way and nothing is obvious. I liked the end to the ending also. It gives the impression of stripping away all corners to hide in - an acceptance of things as they are, not as anyone thinks or wishes.

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Original item by Elaine

Thank you for your comment on 'for a moment' :-)

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Hi,
Thanks for your comment re 'for a moment' :-)

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hi andy,
thanks re for a moment. i always like to get feed back tho i'm unsure as to what the sub text may be :-)x

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Enjoyed this, I found the last lines not sad, but invigoarting - seizing control and clarity.
xx

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Original item by Elaine

I agree with Stella, I really like the title line, and it is all so lyrical. Good one.

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Original item by M.C. Newberry

This made me smile, a witty take on self-pity! Good one.

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Original item by ant

Hello lovely

Thank you very much for your comments on various pomes - always appreciated :) And yes - god, didn't think you'd notice the date with Clear Blue Air, if you read it! I just checked and there was about 90 minutes between the email and the poem being posted!! Another one that just had to be vomited out!

See you tomorrow night m'dear :) xxx

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Original item by Elaine

Agree with Houston, those last 2 lines are killer.

Seems to be on the surface a simple piece, but so much underneath it. I love the African mask metaphor, the strength shown, and the acknowledgement of not knowing. Shades of neg cap again I reckon ;)

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Original item by Elaine

Hello Elaine.
Glad you liked "Widening the Circle of Friends". The best definition of a "fizzog" is my photo!

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Thanks for commenting on "Widening the Cicle of Friends". I think the best definition of a "fizzog" is my photo.
You must be a new poster - I hadn't seen your stuff before. I've just got back from holiwags so I'll make a point of looking over it.
Just a point - it seems tailor-made for an audio accompaniment. Could you do it?

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Original item by M.C. Newberry

Hello Lun
Thanks for commenting on "Widening the Circle of Friends". I think the best definition of a "fizzog" is my photo.

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Hello Cate
Thanks for commenting on "Widening the Circle of Friends". I really didn't need to define "fizzog" - just direct folks to my foto!

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Hello Dave
Thanks for commenting on "widening the Circle of Friends".
Looking at your picture I'm confident that both of us have "fizzogs"!

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Many thanks for your thoughts on "Widening the Circle of Friends".
I have given the etymological derivation of "fizzog" in a comment on the blog.

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I agree with Laura on this one, Ray, well written and hinting at the sadness. Good one.

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Hopefully you'll find some friends here, Zethembiso. I don't know if they'll offer you any sweets, though. But you never know.

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Original item by zethembiso mkhize

I like the first two lines particularly, which make me think of Dylan Thomas. And the petals in the abandoned jam jars. An interesting idea, in which you go on a journey and arrive in a better place.

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Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling

I like this too. The jarring contrast between pain and beauty.

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Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling

Nice one Sis!Jonboy x

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Original item by christine yates

A poem that feels like it belongs in this century, where people seem to be getting more cmplicated all the time - which it expresses very well

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Original item by Elaine

Hi Elaine

Comes across as a painful,delicate piece this.
Nicely done.
john x

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Original item by Elaine

thank you Elaine :o)

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thank you Elaine :o)

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Original item by Tommy Carroll

Too kind Elaine but it is great to know that something touched another..hope to see you soon xx

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Original item by Elaine

Yup I think as the nights draw in Isobel I will have to form a plan lol...but I only wash the dusters that I have paid over a quid for and many a time have used old (ahem washed) undies for the job..also odd socks do ok too ha ha ha...oh the joys of it all..catch you soon m'lady :)

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ello Laura :) aye I can do depressive poetry well lol..but honestly I am really a happy, happy woman!..see you soon x

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ello Laura :) aye I can do depressive poetry well lol..but honestly I am really a happy, happy woman!..see you soon x

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Andy..thanks so much for the comments on Unfeeling...I can do miserable well lol :)

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Original item by Andy N

'For all i know, it was just made up stuff.
To bring about an end'

I know this thought. It hurts.

xx

Comment is about An Ending (blog)

Original item by Elaine

Bit confusing this, endings often are. so no prob there. missheard messages and true feelings undisclosed come through. I liked the exotic African mask and 'all just made up stuff' which trips off nicely and familiar though not cliche. The last 2 lines however anre the crunch in this. Protecting yourself without overstating things, the power of thse last lines easily missed I think Win x

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Original item by Elaine

Like the use of his African masked melted..his native persona..the only little nit I have is the use of shadow/s twice perhaps change the second one to darkness?..Wot dya think?..mind you then you would have three D words...hmmm lol I shall shurrup!!

Save to say I enjoyed this sad one..x

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Original item by Elaine

Well written Ray. I know this so well having worked on the district with the elderly for quite a time..you got stuff spot on there..Incon pad down the toilet..stark.

Comment is about Unwound (blog)

Lyrical for me and I so enjoyed the where do you go when you go where you do line...nice work :)

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Original item by M.C. Newberry

Oh, yes - it's in the diary! 22nd, I'll be there. X

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he wondered that if despair had a scent so strong her nose would twitch...just great that is!...Derek..you are a local lad New Brighton ain't you?...you should think of trying these read at one of the poetry venues about the Wirral. Honestly these would go down well read aloud :)

I enjoyed the poem in a miserable kind of way...lol

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Original item by ant

Cheers for comment Elaine hope you're well, are you still coming to Guitar n Verse @ Tyldesley on 22nd?? Jeff XX

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Original item by Elaine

lmao, I have to admit, when I first glanced at this my reaction was "Oh Lord, one of those bots has hacked someone's account and posted spam" Upon reading more than the first line I realized it was a poem.

Honestly though, nice take on someone going back out and starting that whole thing all over again. The line:
"Home now, thank Christ, safe behind the door, the double
Lock and triple"
really stood out to me, I've felt that way so many times since my marriage went south.

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Original item by ant

The idea of this is very well thought out.
Personally, there are too many joining words for my liking.
Like a pardon could easily have just been a pardon for example.
The berberis could have had an adjective to describe it more fully instead of the "a shrub called" etc.

Liked the last verse very much.

Welcome to WOL Emma J

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Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling

Very enjoyable poem, Andy. I love "there is a hesitation" but wasn't so sure about mustard gas. I like what you're saying though. XX

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Original item by Andy N

Wow, John, this is brill. I did not expect how the poem builds. Really good poem.

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