Dave! This poem is beautiful! It is so nice! It's just incredible! Love it so much! Can't find the words to express myself! This poem is really one of the best.
Love and hugs,
Larisa

Comment is about True Love Starts... (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Those last two line pack the punch as I guess you wanted..but to be honest I like it without lol..good read either way sir.. :)

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Hello MC - Thank you for your kind comments on 'True Love Starts' - they were much appreciated. Good luck with your book! Dave

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Original item by M.C. Newberry

Hi Shirley, thanks for your comments. I'd give it a go, it's only 70p or so for 40 such articles in a trashy mag so you can scribble on them until you get summing useful! My book is called 'A Method In My Madness'. You can buy it on Amazon, order it through a book shop using the ISBN or get it from me! :)

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Original item by Gemma Lees

Thanks, Stef, but have to admit I never did learn how to play the thing! xx

Comment is about Mama Santa (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

a silk scarf!!!
now come on Lynn-
what can you play on a silk scarf?

'wrapping around the christmas tree' p'raps?

I,ll get me coat-

I,m presently having guitar lessons
-so far I ,ve learned how to
unzip the case-hahaha!

made me 'chorkle L.D.

was gonna say it made me feel highly strung
but I,ve only got one coat-lol!

S+P=xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Comment is about Mama Santa (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Honest sentiment and sentimentality are unrelated. I like this - coming as it does from the heart.
M.C.

Comment is about True Love Starts... (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Franz- the click and the tut have differing sound values- :o)

Comment is about Persephone's Perpetuum (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hi Zeth
(please pardon the liberty)

you will never find
a greater companion.

lovely poem.
thank you.

Patricia&Stef.xx

Comment is about He knows! (blog)

Original item by zethembiso mkhize

Mike - thanks for the kind enquiry. Never felt
better! But the imagination is God-given in my
view.
M.C.

Comment is about BE STILL (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Wow! You've done something I've never had the courage to do. Well done.
It flows and reads very well.
Martin mentioned you have a book? Is it listed? I'd like to take a look at it. Cute illustration.

Shirley

Comment is about "Love You Millions" A Cut-Up Type Poem (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Hello Ann, 'Sensorial' just thought i'd let the pen go where it wanted to although originally it began as a 'Men are from Mars' idea. Appreciate your comments thanks.

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Yes, this was way too cryptic, Ray, but now I find it interesting as you've told us a story through the names of cocktails!

p.s. I have only ever heard of two of them - Screwdriver and Fuzzy Navel!

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Compere is the lovely Louise Coulson

Comment is about Back to business at Write Out Loud Wigan tonight (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Yikes - think I would have needed to be psychic to work that one out! Now I understand, I see more humour in it though. Maybe you could give us some explanations and ask us to put the cocktails to it next time.... xx

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You're not the only one by any means, Isobel. It's a list of shorts/cocktails. Shortlist. One is meant to discern in the narrative arc a night of debauchery
Americano - a yank

Cable Car - on top of the world

Hollywood - living the dream

Redheaded Slut - he meets a girl

Screwdriver - speaks for itself?

Pearl Harbour - suddenly the drink takes its toll

Mudslide - things get messy and slide downhill

Banshee - she's not too good, either

Tomahawk - and she has a tomahawk

Fuzzy Navel - things calm down, you try to contemplate and make sense but...

Sombrero - you're out.

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Sorry - it's lost on me. You'll have to explain it. I did think it was an odd poem. I like to understand stuff though - so if you would be so good...

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I'm so glad your STD test was clear Jeff - we don't need to worry about you coming to Wigan! ;-) xx

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Thanks for your comment on my poem - glad it entertained. I've enjoyed taking a look through yours. I like your Thoughts at Christmas - in particular the way you accept loss as part of life and the fact that you can still see the magic in that life.

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Aaa but... I wonder what the bore exercising his jaw is making of you? Funny subject for a poem. Most original.

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Original item by M.C. Newberry

thanx:)

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Review is about Blind Poetics on 14 Nov 2011 (event)

Oh yes Jeff! there are many things that we wish for to happen that just aint gonna happen!

Comment is about It Just Ain't Gonna Happen!! (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Thank you guys for welcoming me so warmly. I do feel at home. I am really going to enjoy my time here at WOL! I can feel it!

Comment is about zethembiso mkhize (poet profile)

Original item by zethembiso mkhize

Hi Jeff. Thanks for your comments on Autism. There is a good clear explanation on Autism and Aspergers syndrome on the National Autistic Society' website. It can be a difficult thing to understand but affects far more people directly and inderectly than most realise. Keep Well. Win

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Hi Tom. Thanks for your lovely comments on my poem 'autism' It wrote itself in my head! Win X

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

we shall brave the elements
and say-WOW!

P&S

Comment is about The End of Summer (IV) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Win;

Regarding End of Summer IV.. I agree m8. I will sit down and get onto this when I get chance (Running round looking for a new job at the moment).

Hope you are good. May have a idea for you regarding readings in the new year too (Will drop you a email).

Cheers

A

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi Win;

Regarding End of Summer IV.. I agree m8. I will sit down and get onto this when I get chance (Running round looking for a new job at the moment).

Hope you are good

Cheers

A

Comment is about The End of Summer (IV) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

your best one yet young Dave.
so say two-
of one heart!

Patricia and Stef.xx

Comment is about True Love Starts... (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Hi Andy, glad you liked Autism. Yes it is rather compact. I like that style hence I suppose my comments on your latest. Win x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Andy,
You have capture things very nicely in this one.
Could it do with a trim however? e.g.

In 1st stanza didn't understand 2nd lne.
'like they are' could be replaced with 'as' in 2nd stanza
'making it appear' with 'so' in 3rd

the last part is perfect for me. A great seaside snapshot. Win x

Comment is about The End of Summer (IV) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Jeff;

thanks for the comments over End of Summer IV.. Yeah, there is a little edit or two that needs making which I'll get to in the future.

As for been a Means to an End, I can imagine it been a nightmare but oddly fun too! See you Tuesday!

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Thanks Jeff, Francice and Philipos for your comments here..

I agree with you Philipos over the first stanza.. Am proud of the full piece, but am a huge fan of the first stanza too.

Yes, Francine the piece is very atomsphere based. Was a challenge to write something where so much is sad but not really said.

And Jeff - As a means to an End.. I could imagine it been a total nightmare trying to do this but who knows! lol

Comment is about The End of Summer (IV) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

good stuff, terry.. may have split up the last line a bit but it's a top piece, man.. A

Comment is about And After (blog)

Hi Noetic - thanks for commenting, it is much appreciated. I guess red roses 'crop up' in quite a few poems, though dear Spike's 'The New Rose' is perhaps the poem you were alluding to - the one where the baby discovers their thorns...

I wonder why thornless roses aren't cultivated - have they never been admitted to Eton? ;)

Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about True Love Starts... (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Ragged plastic bags of men,
corrugated steel in makeshift den,
bellies begging bring me bonee to chew,
for i haven't eaten for a week or two.

'we' are eating sunday lunch,
already bursting from a blow up brunch,
no time to let and digest mass,
while their skinny selves have had no faecal pass.

Why is it, why indeed,
do we sweat so much,
while their stomachs bleed?


The world is destroying itself nick, destroying itself with the greed of the west. Yet still while we are doing this their are peoples that cannot eat.

Top poem nick

noetic

x

Comment is about UNCARING MAN (blog)

Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER

I like the last line in-particular in this poem. I dont know if you know of Spike Milligans poetry, but he makes reference to the red rose in one of his more famous poems. A reference to beauty and how that beauty can be laden with thorns. I remarked to J Williams about his poem on the heart, i will say the same with this one. The simplicity of the poem centers the soul to how fragile the heart is.

Nice one dave.

best wishes

noetic.

Comment is about True Love Starts... (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

I really like this one too, Andy - very atmospheric!

Comment is about The End of Summer (IV) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Yes, the first four lines really stand out because it leaves the reader to imagine so much more...

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Awesome - Congratulations, John!

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Lovely, true sentiments, Dave.

Comment is about True Love Starts... (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Nice one, Tommy, except clicks and tuts are synonyms as expressed with 'expell her breath' - otherwise leaves a lot to the imagination.

Comment is about Persephone's Perpetuum (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Like first stanza best but a great poem all round. Piccy was super too.

Comment is about The End of Summer (IV) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

oops!
nearly forgot to thank you
for commenting on me 'orsey poem.

can,t wait to see what comes
of my inspiring you.

its not that sexy angel on horseback is it?
oooooh you are awful-
but I like you!

Mad dog.xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

no probs Lynn.
I,ll catch you tomorrow evening
dont want you standing by
on my behalf as it were.

cheers love.

S&P.xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

hi Lynn.
was just nicking on and off
in the middle of skyping someone.

yeh,the 'postcard'
is a pikky we took while in Porthmadog
which might give you a chuckle.

what I need to do
while you are on sometime tomorrow
or whenever it suits you
and inbetween changing my poem
is put it on the blog

once you have had a quick look
I,ll delete it
because if I put it on now
the present poem goes off as you know.

so I,ll leave the present poem on till
tomorrow evening
then see if we connect at that time.

aint no big thing
its just to let you know we were
finkin of yer.

until then
au revoir mon cherie!

Stef&Trish.xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

ok i havent read the poem but now want to see it...mike post it to my inbox? i think its good to keep vigilant about censorship issues :)

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hi Lynn- I stand corrected (the name did look awkward with the foto! :o/) Thank you for your comment. :o)

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Lynn- I stand corrected (the name did look awkward with the foto! :o/) Thank you for your comment. :o)

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